Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear John,
I am great to hear that you are planning to go on a camping for the first time in this summer. I think , you would really enjoy your holiday on campsite. Firstly, it is best way to escape from besy routine and enjoy nature with family or friends.
Moreover, you can try hiking , swim in lake and worn wire and camping is a activity which helps in increasing concentration.
However, camping does have some disadvantages . Because weather is unpreditable and camping can not possible in bad weather such as rain, storm . Sleeping in tent is quite uncomfortable as compared to staying in hotel and off course lost of equipment should be carried in order to prepare food.
Why not I join you on this camping trip? It would be great fun together and we can decide which camping site we should explore. Let me know what you think.
Best wishes ,
Aman
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy camping, outline the disadvantages, and express interest in joining the trip. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the disadvantages are listed briefly without much elaboration, and the suggestion to join the trip is quite sudden. To improve, try to expand on your points with more descriptive language or personal anecdotes to make the letter feel more natural and engaging while ensuring all parts of the task are fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'However' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors, such as the spacing around commas and the misuse of 'off course' instead of 'of course'. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the connection between sentences could be smoother. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring consistent paragraph structure will help improve the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message, such as 'unpredictable', 'concentration', and 'equipment'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation that affect the precision of your writing. For example, 'I am great to hear' should be 'I am glad to hear', and 'worn wire' is unclear in the context of activities. Additionally, 'besy routine' is a spelling error for 'busy'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring that your word choices are accurate and appropriate for the context of a friendly letter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The letter contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'go on a camping' (should be 'go camping'), 'in this summer' (should be 'this summer'), and 'camping can not possible' (should be 'camping is not possible'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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