Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 7.0)
Dear Tom,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing in respect of the proposed holiday summer camp we talked about. You will definitely enjoy your time there because a lot of students from other schools will be there and you will definitely make new friends.
Unfortunately, this period is a rainy season and most activities may be cancelled because of incessant rainfalls. During this period, mosquitoes are rampant and you may be prone to contracting Malaria and cough. Especially when you don't go prepared with your thick coverings, repellant and head warmer.
I would suggest you cancel your trip and schedule it to November. By this time, the rainfall will be greatly reduced and I will be free from coursework to accompany you. This time will help both of us to bond and have fun since it's been two years we last saw eachother.
I hope my request is given a favourable consideration as I look forward to hearing your response soon.
Warm regards,
Florence Udeh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained why your friend would enjoy camping, identified potential disadvantages such as weather and health risks, and clearly stated your desire to join them. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the content is slightly repetitive regarding the 'rainy season' and the suggestion to reschedule. To reach a higher band, you could expand more on the positive aspects of camping, such as the nature experience or the relaxation it offers, rather than focusing primarily on the negative aspects and the rescheduling plan.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily. You use some cohesive devices like 'Unfortunately' and 'By this time' to link your thoughts. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel slightly disjointed. Overall, the progression of ideas is logical and the letter is easy to read.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'incessant rainfalls' and 'favourable consideration' show an attempt to use more sophisticated language. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'proposed holiday summer camp' (a camping holiday is usually not a 'camp' in this context) and 'thick coverings' (which sounds unnatural). The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but incorporating more precise collocations related to outdoor activities would improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While most of your sentences are clear, there are some grammatical errors, such as 'it's been two years we last saw eachother' (should be 'since we last saw each other') and 'I hope my request is given a favourable consideration' (which is slightly formal and awkward for a letter to a friend). Punctuation is generally correct, but there are occasional slips. The errors do not impede communication, but more consistent control over complex structures is needed for a higher band.
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