Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Ayush,
I hope you're fine. I'm really impressed by your idea going on a camping holiday. Since it is your first time experiencing such idea, I'll give you some helpful advice so you don't have to face any problem during the camping.
This camping is a kind of adventure which one should experience at least once in their life. There are lots of activities to do. For example, preparing dinner with the use of stones, sticks and fire; kind of like barbecue party, which you already likes very much. Also, there is also an activity to go on hiking which we loved it when we went on hiking last summer.
However, there are some side effects of doing this. For instance, there will be a lots of mosquitoes, and their bites can lead to some fever. Also, you have to use your water effectively because you'll not find any source of water in camping and rivers will also be very far from camping site.
I'm also free this summer so maybe I can join you during this camping. It would be a lot of fun. Can't wait to see you.
Best wishes,
Ayush.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained why your friend would enjoy camping, identified potential disadvantages, and confirmed your interest in joining. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are more fully developed. For instance, when discussing the disadvantages, you could expand on how to mitigate the mosquito issue or how to pack supplies more effectively. The current response is clear and relevant, meeting the requirements of the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily. You use some cohesive devices like 'However', 'For instance', and 'Also' to link your points. To improve, try to vary your linking words further and ensure that referencing is precise. For example, in the second paragraph, 'which we loved it' is slightly awkward; a smoother transition would be 'which we both enjoyed'. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for this task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'camping holiday', 'hiking', and 'mosquitoes'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'experiencing such idea' instead of 'having such an idea' and 'side effects' which is usually reserved for medicine rather than camping disadvantages. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and a wider range of descriptive language to make your writing more engaging.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'I hope you're fine' (a bit unnatural; 'I hope you are doing well' is better), 'which you already likes' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'there will be a lots of' (article error). You also have some issues with verb tense consistency, such as 'which we loved it'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and article usage. Increasing your control over complex sentence structures will help you achieve a higher score.
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