Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mina ,

I am extremely happy to hear that you are planning to go on camping this summer. I hope you will enjoy a lot as you love to do experiments and different activities. You will also get a chance to do cooking on wood fire that tastes really delicious.

I recommend you to bring enough water , first aid kit , snacks, wood or essential items for survival. The only disadvantage of going on camping is we don’t have access to electricity that is why at night it will really hard to sleep due mosquitoes. Take a mosquito cream or spray with you. I really want to join you but unfortunately I have family function at home, so I couldn’t join you.

I hope you will have a wonderful day. Thank you so much for sharing this with me .

Your sincerely

Sukh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining why the friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and declining the invitation. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. While the points are relevant, they are somewhat brief. For instance, the explanation of why the friend would enjoy camping is limited to a single sentence about experiments and cooking. To improve, you should expand on these points with more detail and personal anecdotes to fully develop your ideas and meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into three short paragraphs, which is appropriate for a letter format. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited. The transitions between sentences are somewhat abrupt, and the flow could be improved by using more varied linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', 'consequently'). The paragraphing is functional, but the overall progression of ideas feels a bit mechanical. Increasing the variety of cohesive devices would help the text flow more naturally and improve the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and sophistication. You rely on basic terms like 'happy', 'enjoy', and 'delicious'. There are also some minor collocation issues, such as 'do experiments' (conduct experiments) and 'do cooking' (cook). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise and descriptive language. For example, instead of 'really hard to sleep', you could use 'challenging to get a restful night's sleep'. Expanding your range of collocations and using more specific vocabulary will significantly enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'go on camping' (go camping), 'due mosquitoes' (due to mosquitoes), and 'I have family function' (I have a family function). Additionally, the closing 'Your sincerely' is incorrect; it should be 'Yours sincerely'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall accuracy. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and proofreading for small articles will help improve your score.

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