Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear friend,
I hope you enjoyed your holiday. I know you told me that you want to go camping this time, so I just want to let you know that you can visit Tobermory. It is a very beautiful place, and you can go this time because i listen about that there in new place you can visit for camping is Grotto. it is very beautiful, and there you can also do tracking it is a very amazing experience you can do it. One of my friends told me she recently visited. She spent a lot of time there with her friends, and they enjoyed it a lot during camping, but she also told me there are dangerous species. They know about this because some other tourist told them, and also there are some insects you have to be careful of; you can take some mosquito repellent. Also, I would like to visit that place this summer because it is a very interesting place and many things you can enjoy there.
Thank you.
Jainee patel
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points: explaining why the friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and confirming your interest in joining. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, the explanation of why the friend would enjoy it is vague, focusing mostly on the location 'Tobermory' rather than the experience of camping itself. The mention of 'dangerous species' is a good attempt at describing a disadvantage, but it lacks specific detail. To improve, you should expand on your ideas with more descriptive language and personal reasoning to fully satisfy the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is written as a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. In IELTS letters, you should use clear paragraphing to separate your introduction, the body points, and your closing. While there is a basic logical flow, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and repetitive (e.g., 'it is', 'and', 'also'). The transition between ideas is often abrupt, such as moving from the location to the insects without a clear link. Using a wider range of linking words like 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', or 'consequently' would significantly improve the structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple adjectives like 'beautiful' and 'amazing' throughout the text. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'i listen about that there in new place', which is unnatural and imprecise. The phrase 'do tracking' is incorrect; the correct term is 'hiking' or 'trekking'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to travel and outdoor activities, and avoid repeating the same words in close proximity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'i listen about that there in new place', which lacks correct verb tense and word order, and 'some other tourist told them', which should be plural. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences that lack proper conjunctions or full stops. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of complex sentence structures and the frequency of errors in basic grammar prevent a higher score.
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