Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Rhoan,
I am glad to know that you are going for a camping holiday this summer to the beautiful place Tobermory.
It is worth seeing place, there is lot small lakes and ponds which make this place a heaven. Another, the view of summer time is never explained in word. On last summer, I enjoyed the tracking and rafting with my friends. As, it is your first camping trip do not forget to include life saving things such as lighter, a life jacket and knife. On more thing, always aware about yours surrounding because its forest area, sometime wild animals are appeared on the camp site.
Regarding the drawbacks of this site, there is one recycling bins or container are available, individuals have to carry there Garbage with themselves.
I know you miss my company, but I have to prepare myself for the entrance exam of IT companies.
Hope you really enjoy your summer camping holidays.
With regards.
Gurveer Singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained why your friend would enjoy the trip, mentioned the lack of waste facilities as a disadvantage, and clearly stated that you cannot join them. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of why they would enjoy it is brief, and the advice on safety is a bit disjointed. To improve, try to expand on your ideas with more descriptive language or personal anecdotes to better engage the reader and fully develop the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, 'Another, the view of summer time' and 'On more thing' are awkward transitions that disrupt the flow. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack clear logical links, such as the transition between the safety advice and the mention of wild animals. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring they are used correctly would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several instances of word-choice errors and unnatural collocations. Phrases like 'worth seeing place' (should be 'a place worth seeing') and 'life saving things' (should be 'safety equipment') indicate a need for more precise vocabulary. Additionally, there are some spelling and grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your expression, such as 'tracking' instead of 'trekking'. Focusing on learning common collocations and checking for word-form accuracy will help you reach a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Your writing shows a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('there is lot small lakes'), article usage ('the view of summer time'), and prepositional errors. Some sentences are also structurally incomplete or awkward, such as 'there is one recycling bins or container are available'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Working on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips will be beneficial.
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