Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Aman,

I am writing this letter to tell you about the camping holiday you want to plan. This would be a best idea to enjoy holidays.

I feel that there are numerous activities that makes it more memorable. First of all, the place near to the lake where you can enjoy the water movements, eating and playing. There is also a hiking of around 2-3 kilometers . Most of the people takes their own tents and spending nights in it and also doing cooking at the same place, which makes moment wonderful.

Only demerit for camping is bear's attack, but it is very rare and keep a bear spray with you.

I also want to give you company because I am free at that time. This is the best place to spend time together after a long time. Tell me when we will going for a camping.

I am waiting for your reply and happy to join your company.

Yours Lovingly,

Prabhjot

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing potential disadvantages, and confirming your interest in joining. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the description of the camping site and the 'bear attack' point are quite brief and lack the descriptive detail needed to fully engage the reader. To improve, try to expand on your ideas with more specific examples or personal anecdotes. While the tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, the overall development of ideas remains at a basic level, which prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'First of all' and 'I also', which provide a clear structure. However, the transitions between sentences are sometimes a bit mechanical, and the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. Additionally, some sentences feel slightly disconnected, such as the transition between the hiking description and the mention of tents. Improving the variety of your cohesive devices will help your writing flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary such as 'hiking', 'tents', and 'bear spray'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'water movements' (which is unnatural) and 'give you company' (which should be 'keep you company'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and a wider range of descriptive adjectives to make your writing more vivid and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('activities that makes', 'people takes'), incorrect verb forms ('when we will going'), and missing articles ('a hiking'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent throughout the letter.

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