Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sarah,
Hello. I hope you are doing okay. I'm fine here and really excited to join you on the camping holiday this summer. As you mentioned that you are planing a trekking in Himachal Pradesh, I'm all in. Well, I have been on a trek site once and I'm aware of the things we should consider before packing our bags.
Firstly, the weather condition changes there after every hour and we must pack some winter clothes such as jackets, gloves and a cap. Moreover, although it is a autumn season, the tendency of mosquitoes and ants would be high, so we must pack the repellent to keep the insects way. Apart from this, I assure you that you will enjoy the serenity and calmness of the mountains. The long trek will make you feel a little tired but the scenic view will be worth it.
Lastly, the day I decided to go on a trek with you, I made all the possible arrangements we would require such as booking of a hostel, cab and a round air ticket. It has been a long time since we catch up and I think this is the best time to rewind ourselves.
Excited to see you soon.
Love,
Harman
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy the trip (serenity and calmness), describe disadvantages (weather changes and insects), and confirm your participation. However, the task asks for advice regarding a 'camping holiday,' but your response focuses almost exclusively on 'trekking.' While these are related, the specific advice regarding camping (tents, sleeping bags, cooking outdoors) is missing. To reach a higher band, ensure your advice is more directly aligned with the specific activity requested in the prompt. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'Moreover,' 'Apart from this,' and 'Lastly' to guide the reader. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is generally easy to follow. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between the camping advice and your personal arrangements is smoother, as the shift feels a bit abrupt.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'serenity,' 'calmness,' and 'arrangements.' There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'trek site' (instead of 'trekking route'), 'tendency of mosquitoes' (instead of 'prevalence' or 'number'), and 'keep the insects way' (instead of 'away'). Additionally, 'rewind ourselves' is not the standard idiom; 'recharge our batteries' or 'unwind' would be more natural. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but lacks the precision required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'planing a trekking' (should be 'planning a trek'), 'it is a autumn season' (should be 'it is autumn'), and 'since we catch up' (should be 'since we caught up'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency, particularly when discussing past experiences versus future plans.
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