Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sarah,
How have you been? I hope you're doing well. I have received your letter. It is really excited that you are planning to go camping in this summer. I wanted to give you advice on few things.
To begin with, you'll have hiking experience in a life for the first time. so, it is obvious that you gonna enjoy it. You'll get to know about how beautiful scenery will look spectacular from the top and also, feel adventurous.
Furthermore, steep way can be harder for you to climb so be careful and take gloves with to protect you hand to get injury. Apart from this, also carry a good quality fabric backpack with you to keep you stuff like tifin box, ropes, water bottle, and first-aid kit in case of emergency.
My friend have also planned for hiking this summer. Let's see if I am gonna make
Anyways, I hope everything goes well. Let me know what you think, and I hope to hear from you soon.
Best wishes,
Afroza
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and stating your interest in joining. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the advice regarding the 'steep way' and 'gloves' is quite specific but lacks a broader context about the camping experience itself. The final point about joining your friend is left incomplete ('Let's see if I am gonna make'), which impacts the overall task completion. To improve, ensure that each point is fully developed with clear, coherent sentences and that all thoughts are brought to a logical conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter follows a logical structure with an appropriate opening and closing. You have used some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Apart from this' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and the incomplete sentence at the end of the third paragraph. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the advice and the final invitation is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring that every sentence contributes to a smooth progression of ideas and avoid leaving thoughts unfinished.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using words like 'spectacular', 'adventurous', and 'emergency'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'hiking experience in a life' instead of 'hiking experience of a lifetime' and 'tifin box' (which is not standard English). Some phrasing is also repetitive or informal, such as 'gonna'. To improve, try to use more precise vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are appropriate for a letter to a friend while maintaining a natural, standard English style.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'It is really excited' (should be 'exciting'), 'take gloves with to protect you hand' (should be 'your hands'), and 'My friend have also planned' (subject-verb agreement error). Additionally, the sentence 'Let's see if I am gonna make' is grammatically incomplete. While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall clarity and fluency of your writing.
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