Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear friend,

I am writing this letter to you give advice about a camping holiday for the first time. I want to give you advice you must go imagicaa adventure theme park .

I would like to inform you about Imagica theme park there are many more adventures and activities to do for enjoyment. I know you very well what you like or dislike so you must enjoyed camping holiday there.

Here are some possible disadvantages they happened with you so take care of them like I suggest you bringing some snacks and water bottles with you also for hygiene purposes you take wet tissue and extra clothes with you.

You go and enjoyed there, if you have time this summer so we go together for this camping holiday in summer. We enjoyed and play games together in this camping.

I am waiting for your response how much you enjoyed this summer Holiday camping and when did we plan for holiday together. If you need any help from my side feel free to contact me on …….

Your friend,

Shilpa Chaudhary

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all three bullet points, but the development is limited. You suggest a specific theme park ('Imagicaa') rather than a general camping holiday, which slightly misses the intent of the prompt. While you mention disadvantages like hygiene and the need for snacks, these are presented as a list of tips rather than a description of the challenges of camping itself. The final point regarding joining the friend is addressed, but the connection between the advice and the invitation is somewhat disjointed. To improve, ensure you focus on the nature of camping (e.g., sleeping in tents, being outdoors) rather than a specific commercial venue.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is divided into paragraphs, which helps the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as 'Here are some possible disadvantages'. Transitions between sentences are often missing, making the flow feel choppy. For example, the jump from discussing the theme park to listing hygiene tips lacks a clear logical bridge. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'on the other hand', 'consequently') would help the reader follow your argument more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrases like 'give advice', 'many more', and 'enjoyed'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'they happened with you' and 'for hygiene purposes you take wet tissue'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is insufficient to express more complex ideas or nuances about the camping experience. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more descriptive adjectives and topic-specific vocabulary related to outdoor activities and travel.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, particularly with verb tenses and sentence structure. For instance, 'you must enjoyed camping' should be 'you would enjoy camping', and 'if you have time this summer so we go together' is grammatically incorrect. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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