Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Bala,

I'm writing to advice you the requirements and best places for your upcoming summer camp. I suggest you Cape breton in Nova Scotia is the best place to enjoy your summer holidays.

Firstly, Cape breton is famous for it's nature and lakes. I know you love boating a lot alongside the nature's view. You can make friends here as so many people prefer this place to camp and Trailers are available to take rent at a reasonable cost.

In addition to that there are lot more activities happening every weekend as all the campers meet and celebrate Music, dance, Barbecue events, Boat racing and much more. Summers are really hot here than Toronto and possibility of crocodiles in the river, be careful when you go for swimming.

Moreover, You can google about this place and let me know what do you think? If you like to spend your summer holidays here i would like to join with you to double the fun this year.

I Can't wait to hear back from you soon.

Your's lovingly

Bala

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and expressing your interest in joining them. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the content is slightly underdeveloped in places. For example, the mention of 'crocodiles' in Nova Scotia is factually confusing and distracts from the advice. To improve, ensure your ideas are realistic and fully supported with more descriptive detail. You have maintained a clear purpose throughout the letter, which helps the reader follow your suggestions easily.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'In addition to that', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. The referencing is generally clear, though the structure of the final paragraph is slightly abrupt. Improving the variety of your linking words and ensuring that each paragraph flows naturally into the next will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly, such as 'reasonable cost' and 'upcoming summer camp'. However, there are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'take rent' instead of 'rent' or 'hire', and 'advice' used as a verb instead of the noun 'advise'. Additionally, there are some minor spelling errors like 'it's' (should be 'its') and 'Your's' (should be 'Yours'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary and ensure that your word forms are grammatically accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'I'm writing to advice you the requirements' (should be 'advise you of'), 'Summers are really hot here than Toronto' (should be 'hotter than'), and 'possibility of crocodiles' (missing article 'the'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed without errors.

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