Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Adam,
How are you these days? I hope you and your family are doing really well.
I'm writing to discuss about the camping holiday that you had booked for this summer. I undesrtand that this is your first camping trip, and you would be excited for the same. I am pretty much sure that you will enjoy this trip to the fullest as you are travelling with your classmates. Moreover, the weather at the destination is pleasant and calming.
Furthermore, you will be able to see a wide varieties of lakes, birds, trees and flowers. I would also recommend you to do a star gazzing at night, you will be awestruck with the night beauty.Howeever, please be mindful that the eateries are kept inside the vehicle before you sleep, as there are chances of bears showing up at night.
Furthermore, would it be possible for you to spek to your friends and check if they would be comfortable with me joining the group, as I am also interested in exploring this place.
Feel free to contact me anytime.
All the best,
Aduja
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain why the friend would enjoy the trip, mention the potential disadvantage of bears, and express interest in joining. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention the weather and scenery, these points could be expanded with more descriptive detail to fully satisfy the 'well-developed' requirement of higher bands. The mention of the bear safety is a good, specific detail that adds relevance to the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'However' to link your ideas. While the progression is generally clear, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format. To improve, ensure that the flow between sentences is more natural; for example, the transition from discussing star gazing to bear safety is a bit abrupt. Overall, the message is easy to follow throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'awestruck', 'pleasant', and 'be mindful'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'undesrtand' (understand), 'star gazzing' (stargazing), and 'spek' (speak). Additionally, the phrase 'discuss about' is grammatically incorrect; 'discuss' is a transitive verb and does not require a preposition. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider variety of precise collocations to reach a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional 'would it be possible for you to...' and the use of 'as' for reasoning. However, there are several grammatical slips, including 'I am pretty much sure' (I am quite sure), 'wide varieties of' (a wide variety of), and the aforementioned 'discuss about'. Punctuation is generally functional, though there is a missing space after the period in 'night beauty.Howeever'. While the meaning is always clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents the writing from reaching the level of 'frequent error-free sentences' required for a Band 7.
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