Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear David,
How're you doing? I'm writing to give you a piece of advice that can be worthy for your camping trip this summer vacation.
There're many activities that you can definitely going to enjoy such as, you would've an opportunity to enjoying bungee jumping which is your favourite adventures sport, and you can explore ancient buildings of Nalanda town, I know you already read about those building in our social science subject during school time. Therefore you've tone of things to enjoy.
Weather can be unpredictable in the Nalanda town so, try to check weather forcasting regularly. Addtionally, try to keep some worm clothes, they may be benificial for you in sudden weather change. Also, keep some snackes for your childern and yourself so you can eat them if you don't have anything to eat in tough time.
I'm extremely sorry for not able to join you, as I'm working on an importnat office project and I can't leave it in middle and this project is quite essential for my future promotion, however, after you trip, I will come to see you.
Best of luck for you vacations and take care!
Cheers!
Arvind
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and stating your availability. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the suggestion of 'bungee jumping' and 'ancient buildings' is a bit generic and could have been more closely linked to the specific experience of camping. While the task requirements are met, the depth of the response could be improved by providing more specific details or personal anecdotes to make the advice feel more authentic and well-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Therefore', 'Additionally', and 'however' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition from discussing the weather to suggesting snacks is abrupt. Paragraphing is used correctly to separate the different topics, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. Overall, the structure is clear, but the use of cohesive devices could be more varied and natural.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'unpredictable', 'beneficial', and 'essential'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'forcasting' (forecasting), 'Addtionally' (Additionally), 'worm' (warm), 'snackes' (snacks), and 'childern' (children). These errors are noticeable but do not impede communication. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of less common lexical items and ensure accuracy in spelling. The word choice is generally appropriate for an informal letter, but more precise vocabulary would enhance the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'you can definitely going to enjoy' (you will definitely enjoy), 'you would've an opportunity to enjoying' (you will have an opportunity to enjoy), and 'I'm extremely sorry for not able to join you' (for not being able to join you). These errors, while not preventing understanding, occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs and gerunds/infinitives.
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