Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
my wish is manifished.
Dear John,
I am writing to offer an advice about your camping holiday. Last week, I got you letter in which you asked my support in order to make your initial camping memorable.
As I am already aware from your love regarding greenery and oceans, I will find your first camping facisinating because this trip is all about exploring every single part of nature. Nevertheless, despite having several moments of enjoyments, camping involves plenty of drawbacks in itself such as wild animals, terrible weather conditions and few concerns may arrive while preparing food. Thus, you might have to be carefull in order to eliminate potential risks.
In addition to that, I recently completed my course with flying colours. Consequently, I am also planning to join you in your trip since it provides me not only some changes from my routine but also supports me in reducing my stress level.
I look forward to your response.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You explain why your friend would enjoy camping, identify potential disadvantages, and confirm your interest in joining. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention 'wild animals' and 'terrible weather' as drawbacks, these points could be expanded with a bit more detail to fully satisfy the requirement for extended ideas. The opening phrase 'my wish is manifished' is irrelevant to the task and should be omitted to maintain focus.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition to that', 'Consequently', and 'Nevertheless' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by slightly awkward phrasing, such as 'I am writing to offer an advice' (advice is uncountable) and the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph. The referencing is generally clear, and the overall structure follows the conventions of an informal letter effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using phrases like 'flying colours' and 'potential risks'. However, there are several spelling errors and word-choice inaccuracies that hinder the precision of your writing. For example, 'manifished' (manifested), 'facisinating' (fascinating), and 'carefull' (careful) are noticeable errors. Additionally, 'offer an advice' is incorrect as 'advice' is an uncountable noun. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and attention to word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional 'if' or 'since' clauses. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, including article usage ('an advice'), prepositional errors ('love regarding' instead of 'love for'), and subject-verb agreement issues. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure occasionally feels slightly mechanical. To improve, focus on mastering basic article usage and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed without errors in tense or preposition choice.
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