Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Shivani,

Hi. I hope this letter finds you well. I am very glad to know that you want my suggestion of places for going on camping holiday.

I would suggest you to go Banff. It is one and a half hour from Calgary. It is a very beautiful place with different amazing scenic beauty. It consists of so many lakes such as Lake Louise. Moraine Lake. In addition to this, Johnson Canyon it is tracking area which includes upper falls and lower falls and there is distance for 3 km to reach those falls. There are picnic spots during track where you can enjoy your meals. There are variety of scenic views where one can click beautiful pictures. At night there is a place at lake side where you can set up your tents and prepare your food.

It comes with some disadvantages. The weather is very cold and also sometimes you will feel less of oxygen. Overall, it will a good experience. I would love to join you and we can experience this together.

In case you have any questions let me know. Also if you decide something then tell me so that i can also do the required preparations.

Take care and i will wait for your reply.

Thank you

Mehak

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and confirming your interest in joining. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, when describing the disadvantages, you mention 'less of oxygen' at high altitudes, which is a bit vague and scientifically inaccurate for Banff. To improve, try to elaborate more on the 'why' behind your suggestions to provide a more comprehensive response. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized, with each paragraph focusing on a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition to this' and 'Overall', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by separating the description of the location from the advice on activities. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented, such as 'Moraine Lake.', which should be connected to the previous sentence to improve the flow of ideas. Improving the use of linking words will help your writing feel more natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the location and activities clearly. You use some descriptive phrases like 'amazing scenic beauty' and 'picnic spots'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'tracking area' (which should be 'hiking trail') and 'click beautiful pictures' (which is slightly informal; 'take photographs' is more standard). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to travel and nature, and be careful with collocations to ensure your word choices sound natural to a native speaker.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'I would suggest you to go Banff' (should be 'I would suggest going to Banff'), 'It is one and a half hour' (should be 'It is an hour and a half'), and 'it will a good experience' (missing the verb 'be'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with sentence fragments. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your complex sentences are constructed accurately. Proofreading for small missing words like articles and auxiliary verbs will significantly improve your score.

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