Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear John,
Hello, how are you? Hope you and your family are doing well. I am writing this letter about the camping holiday you are planning to go on this summer.
I know you are very fond of travelling and exploring new places. This is an opportunity you have always been looking forward to grab. Therefore, this camp will not only let you experience new adventures but also will help you help you socialise with the people of same interest.
However, the camp is organised in the peak summers so it will be difficult to travel for long hours. Also, you will be easily dehydrated with exteme heat while camping and affecting your health.
Nevertheless, i am always willing to make more beautiful memories with you. Moreover, we can together beat the heat of summer while enjoying ourselves. So, let me know the dates when confirmed for the camping.
Meet you soon.
Your's lovingly,
Bern
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing potential disadvantages, and confirming your interest in joining. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the disadvantages section could be more detailed; while you mention dehydration and heat, explaining how to mitigate these or mentioning other common camping challenges would provide a more comprehensive response. The letter is well-structured and follows the required format, meeting the task requirements effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point from the instructions, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Nevertheless', and 'Moreover' to link your thoughts. While these are used correctly, the flow could be improved by varying your transition words further to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the letter maintains a consistent focus throughout.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task. Phrases like 'fond of travelling', 'exploring new places', and 'dehydrated' are used appropriately. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'looking forward to grab' (should be 'looking forward to grabbing') and 'organised in the peak summers' (should be 'during the peak of summer'). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher band. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and idiomatic expressions would enhance your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as the repetition of 'help you' in the second paragraph and the incorrect use of 'Your's' in the sign-off (should be 'Yours'). Additionally, 'exteme' is a spelling error. Despite these slips, your meaning is always clear, and the errors do not cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on proofreading for small punctuation and spelling mistakes, and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence forms to demonstrate greater control.
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