Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Ravi
I am writing this letter Regarding about your trip for camping. I Heard that you are planning to camping Downvalley park. I would like to share same memories that I shall Been visited same trip last year.
In that park there is lot of events and wonder land rides, and Car racing and Many of the events and at the end of the Night they can arranged a leaser show that was Amazing and it's Beautiful Show in my life and one the My faviorut Show in my memories.
I would like to share some advantages of this Camping trip. You may know lot of differnt countries Citizens and they Culture of living life style and I am Very exited to see that laser show so I was thinking about to join in your camping trip and I will quid you and I will share My Best part of last year trip.
Kindly waiting for your Respon's and we can Discuss about furthet Information. I wish you willing to accept to join with you.
Yours lovingly,
Kiran.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining why your friend would enjoy camping, describing disadvantages, and expressing interest in joining. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the 'disadvantages' section is underdeveloped; you mention meeting people from different countries, which is an advantage, but you fail to clearly describe any actual drawbacks of camping as requested. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a friend, but the lack of specific detail regarding the downsides of camping prevents this from reaching a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'In that park there is lot of events' is abrupt, and the connection between ideas within sentences is frequently strained. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'I shall Been visited same trip last year,' which makes the logical progression difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words like 'furthermore,' 'however,' or 'consequently' would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Regarding about,' 'quid you' (likely meant 'guide'), and 'Respon's.' You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common items accurately. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the persistent errors in spelling and word formation—such as 'faviorut' and 'furthet'—hinder the overall quality of the response. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and proofreading for basic spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the text contains frequent errors that occasionally impede communication. You struggle with verb tenses and auxiliary verbs, such as 'I shall Been visited' and 'they can arranged.' Sentence construction is often faulty, with issues in subject-verb agreement and punctuation. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often inaccurate. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct tense usage, and reducing the frequency of grammatical slips.
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