Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Nancy,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing to give you advice about a camping holiday which you are planning to go this summer.
Camping is group activity in which you will find new people and make new friends. The organizer decides places for camping which is located in mountains or forests where you can explore something unique. Moreover, at the night time, it's best feeling to sleep under the beautiful sky because you can analyze different patterns of stars and new planets, that makes our experience enjoyable.
Regarding several disadvantages, When you are staying somewhere in mountains for camping activity, we could meet wild animals sometimes which is rare but we have to be caution all the time. Apart from this, some of the camping sites have very dirty urinal facilities. In Addition, there are some small species which can bite you if you don't wear appropriate clothes.
This summer, I was thinking to visit Paris with family as we have booked everything in advanced. My parents wanted to celebrate their 55th marriage anniversary in foreign country so I decided to give them surprise. One of our common friend wanted to join for activity and you can directly contact him.
Best wishes,
Tez
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You explain why camping is enjoyable, list disadvantages, and clarify your availability. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented. However, the development of the final point is slightly abrupt; while you explain why you cannot join, the transition to suggesting another friend feels a bit disconnected from the main purpose of the letter. Overall, the tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and the purpose is clear throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Regarding', and 'Apart from this' to link ideas. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the referencing in the final paragraph is slightly confusing (e.g., 'One of our common friend'). Improving the flow between sentences would help the text read more naturally. Paragraphing is used correctly to separate the different topics.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'unique', 'appropriate', and 'anniversary'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'group activity' (should be 'a group activity'), 'at the night time' (should be 'at night'), and 'urinal facilities' (which sounds overly clinical; 'sanitary facilities' or 'restrooms' would be more natural). Despite these, the meaning is always clear, and the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'which you are planning to go' (should be 'which you are planning to go on'), 'decides places' (should be 'decides on places'), and 'in advanced' (should be 'in advance'). Additionally, there are issues with articles and pluralization, such as 'One of our common friend' (should be 'friends'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication, and the overall meaning remains clear.
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