Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Friend,
I hope you are doing well. I am also doing fantastic. This summer, making plans to go camping is the best idea. I think , take a few days break from work and responsibities are important that is why I really need to be go on camping. I support your idea and agree to join you. we are best friends and our hobbies are also same. we enjoy our company and we are chilhood friens that is why i think we are enjoy this summer camp.
my friend enjoy alot this camping because they love camping and doing activities and they like to sing the songs in the night with guitar and passion about cooking different types of cuisins.
They are several advantages : we are spending time together after a long time and most imporantly we take a short break from work and feel relax and calm.
however, One Disadvantage of this camping is weather is not good on those days. it may be affect our holidays and may be it will be a bad experience.
Thank you for understanding. I hope you like my advice.
your's loving.
Manpreet Kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task prompt, covering the three bullet points required in a general training letter format. The writer explains why the friend would enjoy camping, such as loving camping activities, singing songs, and cooking. Disadvantages are mentioned regarding the weather, and the writer confirms her willingness to join the camping trip this summer. However, some ideas are underdeveloped and the tone is slightly confused due to shifting pronouns (e.g., referring to 'my friend' instead of addressing the reader directly as 'you'). Overall, all bullet points are present, placing this at a Band 5.5 to 6.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter uses basic paragraphing, though the structure is somewhat fragmented with very short paragraphs and disjointed sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'that is why' and 'and'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when the writer shifts from addressing the friend directly to talking about 'my friend' in the third person. There is an attempt to logically sequence the points required by the task, but the mechanical transitions and lack of smooth progression keep this criterion at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for a basic personal letter, but is heavily limited and repetitive. The student uses simple words and makes notable lexical and spelling errors, such as 'responsibities', 'cuisins', and 'chilhood friens'. While there are some attempts at less common phrases like 'short break from work' and 'different types of cuisines', errors in word choice and spelling occasionally cause strain for the reader. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the message, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing contains a mix of simple sentence forms and some attempts at more complex structures, but these are frequently faulty. There are persistent grammatical inaccuracies, incorrect punctuation, and issues with capitalization and subject-verb agreement, such as 'take a few days break... are important', 'we are enjoy this summer camp', and 'they are several advantages'. Punctuation errors like spaces before commas are also noticeable. The high frequency of errors across sentences means communication is occasionally hindered, aligning closely with Band 5.0.
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