Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear sanam,
I am writing to express my feeling that i am glad to know that you are going to camping on this coming holidays because to escape from busy routine is very good for well-being. I hope you will enjoy alot there because the place where you are going that is very peacefull.its atmisphere is awsum and the fresh air will keep you relax and energetic.
Despite of these benefits there is one drawback of camping that is dangerous of wild animals you have to careful because some time animals loss is can be harmfull.In addition you have to do good arrangement for your food and the place where you can have good sleep like bed or blankets.
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Furthermore, let me tell about my holiday camping i am also planning to go with my friend on camping i need to be relax as well Although its not very easy to go because of some expenses, i believe that i should keep my mind relaxed after along days of tirring.
i am waiting for your response.
yours sincerely,faryal
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
Faryal covers all three bullet points required in the prompt. She explains why her friend Sanam would enjoy camping, mentioning the peaceful atmosphere and fresh air. She also describes disadvantages, noting the danger of wild animals and the need for food and bedding arrangements. Finally, she mentions her own camping plans with a friend. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and the tone is more casual and rushed than a standard semi-formal or friendly letter might ideally be, though it still addresses the core requirements. Overall, the task is adequately fulfilled, corresponding to a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The letter has a basic overall arrangement, but paragraphing and cohesion are quite faulty. The second paragraph is a large block of text containing multiple distinct ideas (benefits and disadvantages) run together. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'Despite of these benefits', which misuse the preposition. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in 'animals loss is can be harmfull' and the stray floating letter 'f' in the middle of the text. There is a lack of clear progression, leading to a Band 5.0 score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Faryal's vocabulary is adequate for basic communication, but it features frequent spelling and word-choice errors that restrict precision. Examples include 'peacefull' instead of peaceful, 'atmisphere' instead of atmosphere, 'awsum' instead of awesome, and 'loss is can be harmfull'. While she attempts some less common phrases like 'busy routine' and 'well-being', the high frequency of basic errors in spelling ('alot', 'relax' instead of relaxed) and collocation prevents the score from reaching a higher band. This performance sits firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences joined by basic conjunctions or run-on clauses, such as 'I hope you will enjoy alot there because the place where you are going that is very peacefull.' Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected throughout the letter, with multiple sentences starting with lowercase letters and missing terminal punctuation in places. Frequent grammatical errors, such as 'i am going to camping' and 'animals loss is can be harmfull', cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 5.0 level.
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