Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Jackie,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing in respone to your letter regarding why you should go on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. As you know, you are busy in IT business so this is the best time go outside and enjoy picnic at beach.
Firstly, I know that you take a lot of stress their business, and you also suffer from a fatal disease from the last two years. Therefore, you take extra burden their work when it is not complete on time.So, I think it is the superior time to refresh your mind. As a result, you become more productive for their business.
Secondly, you should also message sunscreen cream on your body when you go outside as outside sun UV rays very dangrous for body. You should carry extra sunscreen with you.
Finally, You should also go camping with their office' worker and you get a chance to spend more time with them.
I hope my advice will be helpful. Please let me know what you decide, and i wish you all the best.
Best wishes,
Jass.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers the main parts of the task, though the development is somewhat hindered by language errors and irrelevant tangents. You mention why your friend would enjoy camping, such as 'to refresh your mind' from business stress, which satisfies the first bullet point. However, the second bullet point regarding disadvantages is largely missed, as you instead give advice about applying sunscreen ('you should also message sunscreen cream on your body') rather than describing disadvantages like bad weather or lack of comfort. You briefly touch upon the third point by mentioning going camping with office workers. The tone is appropriate for a friendly letter. However, due to the omission of clear disadvantages and slightly underdeveloped ideas, it fits the Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The letter uses basic sequencing markers such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' to structure the response. Paragraphing is generally appropriate with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing sign-off. However, the logical progression is at times difficult to follow because of confusing phrasing and poor referencing, such as 'their business' or 'their work', which creates ambiguity about who is being referred to. Cohesive devices are used mechanically rather than flexibly. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5 category for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with several unnatural collocations and word choice errors. For instance, the phrase 'message sunscreen cream' incorrectly uses 'message' instead of 'apply' or 'massage', and 'fatal disease' is likely a misuse of vocabulary for stress-related exhaustion. There are also spelling errors like 'respone' instead of 'response' and 'dangrous' instead of 'dangerous'. The lexical range is limited, barely adequate for the task, meaning it aligns with the Band 5 descriptors where noticeable errors cause some difficulty for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but attempts at complex structures often feature grammatical errors. Examples include missing prepositions and incorrect articles ('go outside and enjoy picnic at beach'), tense issues, and pronoun confusion ('you take a lot of stress their business'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but frequent grammatical inaccuracies occasionally impede smooth communication, particularly in the second paragraph. These characteristics reflect the standard of Band 5.
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