Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sandy,

Glad that you going on camping on this holiday and want my suggestion on this, you will enjoy this time spend becuase there are many andventure spots you will see on this place called eldorado park.

This park has devided in two parts one is with the zoo and childern place and another is the tracking and for for the campaign. for you the another place is marvelous you will enjoy the stay and you will need some warm and cozy cloths and also tracking shoes for your stay . Also there is one pond for the fishing , hope you do not forget your fishing kit and your barbcue stand. this all will help you in your smooth and hassle free camping.

For the next summer i will also join you for the trip however this vacation will not possible due to my upcoming examination that held on this summer . i assume you will enjoy your this free time and please last adviced to you is that do not use your phones often ,the reason is that there will be poor signals . see you after your trip.

your faithful,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main situation and give relevant advice, including reasons your friend may enjoy the trip, practical preparations, and your own availability. The park, fishing pond and barbecue details help make the letter personal. However, the task asks you to explain possible disadvantages, and this is not clearly done: poor phone signals are mentioned, but the drawback is not developed as a disadvantage of camping. Your answer also says you would join “for the next summer,” rather than clearly answering whether you can go this summer; the later explanation about examinations makes your position confusing. To strengthen the response, state directly that you cannot join this summer and explain one or two drawbacks, such as cold nights or limited facilities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable opening, a body with camping details, and a closing, so the reader can follow its general purpose. You also use basic links such as “Also,” “however,” and “the reason is.” However, the progression is not consistently clear: the description of the park shifts between its zoo, children’s area and camping area, while the final paragraph moves from your availability to phone advice without a clear transition. Some references, such as “this all” and “your this free time,” are difficult to interpret, and the long first paragraph contains several ideas without clear separation. Organise the letter into distinct paragraphs for enjoyment, disadvantages, and your decision about joining, using clearer linking and reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a range of topic-related words, including “pond,” “fishing kit,” “warm and cozy,” and “hassle free,” which helps communicate practical advice. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “marvelous.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the message harder to understand: “andventure,” “tracking,” “campaign,” and “barbcue” appear where the intended words are adventure, trekking, camping and barbecue. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “this time spend” and “smooth and hassle free camping.” Check spelling carefully and choose familiar, precise collocations; for example, say “spend time outdoors” and “make your camping trip comfortable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including a reason clause with “because” and a contrast introduced by “however.” This shows some effort to vary sentence forms. However, errors are frequent, and several sentences are difficult to process. For example, “Glad that you going on camping” is missing a suitable verb form, while “this vacation will not possible” needs a form of “be.” There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “one pond for the fishing” and the run-on sequence beginning “This park has devided.” Use complete clauses, check verb forms and articles, and divide long sentences into shorter, correctly punctuated ones.

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