Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear AMAZ,
I Hope you are doing well,I am writing this letter to you express some advice for you,because recently, I heard about that you thinking for the camping.
primaily,after 12th examination you was felt nervous and anxity,therefore when you go the kasmir there are lot of amzing hills sations as well as .It is very quite and peacefull palce for everyone,thus,when you going there I think you would enjoy and felling walking in the air.
Moreover,there are some drawbacks like that white tigers are mostly surround by the forest so,to be prepare your self. Might you fell amzing and unique palce.
futhermore, I am also would like to go this camping,owning to I Have been felling boring for 2 months. So, I decied to camping kasmir forest with you . Also we arent
meet toghter scince 2 years.I think it will be best exproing for us and we enjoying and eating delious food . as well as we make it wonderfull jounery.
lastly,I hope you understood all things,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You address all three points: you suggest your friend may enjoy Kashmir’s hills and peaceful surroundings, mention a possible danger in the forest, and clearly say you would like to go together. The personal reference to your friend feeling nervous after exams also helps make the advice relevant. However, the disadvantages are not explained clearly: the reference to “white tigers” is difficult to interpret, and “be prepare your self” does not explain what practical concern your friend should consider. Some reasons for enjoying the trip, such as walking in the fresh air and sharing food, are also only briefly stated. Develop these points with clear, realistic details and make the advice more explicit.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable letter structure, with an opening, separate paragraphs for enjoyment, drawbacks and your willingness to join, and a closing. Sequencing words such as “Moreover,” “furthermore” and “lastly” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and some links do not express a clear relationship. For example, “Might you fell amzing and unique palce” is disconnected from the warning about tigers. The final paragraph also combines your decision, the time since you met, food and the trip’s value without clear organisation. Use shorter sentences and connect each detail directly to the point it supports.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “drawbacks,” “forest,” “peacefull” and “exploring,” and you try to describe the trip as a shared experience. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “anxity,” “amzing hills sations,” “felling walking in the air” and “wonderfull jounery.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “thinking for the camping” and “decied to camping.” These problems sometimes strain the reader’s effort to understand your meaning. Build a small set of accurate phrases for outdoor activities, scenery and practical risks, and check spelling and word forms before finishing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt to form longer sentences using connectors such as “therefore,” “when” and “because,” but control is limited, and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “I am writing this letter to you express” is missing a grammatical link, while “you was felt nervous” combines incompatible verb forms. Other examples include “when you going there” and “I am also would like,” where the verb patterns are incorrect. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, as in the opening sentence, which runs several clauses together. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses with correct verb forms. Check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency and punctuation when editing.
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