Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Susan,

I hope this message finds you well. I'd really happy when you ask my advice to help you with your summer hoilday camping in next month. I would like to share some ideas with my personal camping expereience.

Firstly, I would prepare my bag with some important winter cloths, which is help me to protect cool wind especially in night. I also have some list of the tools wiich help in camping.

Secondly, there have been some disadvantages which I like to say that late-night not to go out without proper guidence.

Lastly, I would like to go camping with you. Would you be free on next Friday or Saturday evenning instead? Please let me know what works best for you, or if you need any additional information I will share some youtube videos of camping.

Thank you so much. Looking forward to spending time together.

Best regards,

TOm Cruise

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make a clear attempt to respond to the letter task: you give advice about preparation, mention a possible safety concern, and say, “I would like to go camping with you.” However, the main requirements are only minimally addressed. The opening says your friend may enjoy camping, but does not explain why; the advice about winter clothes and tools is not connected to enjoyment. The disadvantage is also unclear: “late-night not to go out” does not explain what problem might occur or how it could affect the trip. Your willingness to go is clear, but the suggested Friday or Saturday evening seems unrelated to a summer camping holiday. Develop each point directly and give a specific reason or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, with a greeting, several paragraphs, a closing, and signposting such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly.” This helps the reader identify separate points. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph introduces your experience, then moves to packing advice rather than explaining why Susan would enjoy camping. The disadvantage paragraph is difficult to follow, and the invitation to meet on Friday or Saturday evening does not clearly connect to the camping plan. Some linking phrases feel mechanical rather than showing the relationship between ideas. Organise the body around the three requested points, and use clear transitions to connect each explanation to the advice or invitation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of vocabulary relevant to camping and a friendly letter, including “camping,” “tools,” “proper guidance,” and “spending time together.” The meaning is sometimes weakened by inaccurate spelling and word choice, such as “hoilday,” “expereience,” and “cloths.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, particularly “protect cool wind” and “some list of the tools.” These errors make parts of the advice harder to understand, although the general topic remains apparent. Build accuracy with common camping collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could refer to “warm clothes,” “a list of essential equipment,” and “protection from the cold wind” rather than translating ideas word by word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer sentence forms, including the relative clause “which is help me to protect…” and the conditional-style question “Would you be free…?” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns. Examples include “I'd really happy” (missing a verb), “when you ask my advice” (tense/form), “which is help me” (incorrect verb construction), and “there have been some disadvantages which I like to say” (unclear clause structure). These problems sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms and clause connections. For instance: “I was happy when you asked for my advice” and “Warm clothes will protect you from the cold at night.”

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