Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Amna!

I am happy to hear that you are going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.And i wish you a good luck .You will enjoy your holiday because your friend circle is so good.Their comapny will make your camping trip a memorable one.

But i also want to tell you that there migh be some disadvantages of camping but dont worry if you take all safety measure, you will be safe.Do not go near the Bonnfire, and dont get seperated from your group of friends,and also if you get in to any trouble just inform to the group leader, he will help you.And one more thing, keep some first-aid medicine with you and some snacks along with some energy drinks, because you are going for the first time so you dont know where to get the basic from if you needed them there.

I would love to go with you but unfortunately i got some assignments to complete before the deadline and a presentation to prepare.

Good Luck for your camping holiday

regards

Haif Nazish

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the three requested points: you give a reason Amna may enjoy camping, mention safety-related disadvantages, and explain that you cannot join because of assignments and a presentation. However, the enjoyment point is quite general: “your friend circle is so good” does not explain much about the appeal of camping itself. The disadvantages are also presented mainly as warnings and precautions, rather than clearly describing drawbacks such as uncomfortable weather, insects, or limited facilities. Your decision about joining is clear, but the letter would be more complete if you developed the reasons and made the advice more directly personal to your friend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas are arranged in a broadly sensible order: you begin with encouragement, move to cautions and practical advice, and finish by explaining why you cannot go. Connectors such as “But,” “because,” and “also” help show relationships between points. However, much of the letter is packed into one long paragraph, so the shift from disadvantages to safety advice is not easy to follow. Several ideas are joined in a chain with repeated “and,” which makes the progression feel mechanical. Use separate paragraphs for the enjoyment, drawbacks/advice, and your availability, and vary the linking phrases to make the relationships clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough everyday vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “memorable,” “safety measure,” “group leader,” and “first-aid.” However, the range is limited and some choices are inaccurate or unclear, such as “friend circle” and “get the basic from,” which make the intended meaning less natural. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “comapny,” “migh,” “Bonnfire,” and “seperated.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding the overall advice, but they reduce precision and fluency. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling carefully, especially in key advice and descriptive phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your message is generally understandable, and you attempt longer sentences to explain reasons and give advice. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and longer sentences are often joined without clear punctuation, as in the sentence beginning “Do not go near the Bonnfire.” The opening also contains sentence-boundary problems: “I am happy to hear…” runs into “And i wish…”. There are recurring errors with articles, agreement, and verb forms, for example “a good luck,” “all safety measure,” and “if you needed them.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent as well. Use shorter, accurately punctuated sentences alongside a few controlled complex sentences.

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