Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Rida,

I hope you are doing well, I read your letter two days ago but due to my thesis presentation, I couldn't write you back the very moment.

I am so overwhelmed that you are going on a camping vacation in a few months. It would be one the best experience that you will have in your entire life. You will cherish each and every moment from the beggining to the end. Sitting beside the sea at night, witnessing the nature's beauty with the shining stars and the moon in the sky is honestly heavenly and you will love it for sure. A bonfire with cozy and soft music is all that a person desires.

Bonfire can sometimes be a little harmful as on my last holiday a group my friends were dancing by the lit up fire and due to the heavy wind my collegue caught the fire in her stole which was quite dangerous and everyone got cautious. Eqaully important is another aspect that you should take care of is sometimes there are hazardous chemicals in the ground to kill the tiny insects which may bite and cause infections so be careful of that.

I desperatley want to join you on the holiday but as it's my uncle's wedding in the summers and all of my family members have to fly to lahore to attend the event I can not come along with you. I can't put into words how I am holding myself back.

All the love and prayers to you. Enjoy your trip and capture the beautiful memories.

Your dearest friend,

Kisa.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points in the task: you explain why Rida might enjoy the scenery and atmosphere, describe risks involving a bonfire and insects, and clearly say that you would like to join but cannot because of a family wedding. The personal example about your colleague makes the disadvantage more concrete, and the friendly closing suits the purpose. This meets the task well, while some ideas are less fully developed: the insect-related warning is brief and its practical implications are not explained, and the enjoyment points rely mainly on general enthusiasm. To strengthen the response further, add a little more specific advice about preparing for these drawbacks and extend the reasons you think Rida would enjoy the trip.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, a paragraph about the benefits, one about disadvantages, and a final paragraph explaining your availability. This progression makes the message easy to follow, and phrases such as “another aspect” help signal a shift. However, some connections are awkward or unclear. The opening joins two complete thoughts with a comma (“I hope you are doing well, I read your letter…”), while “Equally important is another aspect that you should take care of is…” makes the relationship between ideas difficult to follow. The final paragraph also moves quickly from the wedding explanation to your disappointment. Use clearer sentence boundaries and simpler transitions so cohesion feels less mechanical and the ideas flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a personal letter, including expressive phrases such as “cherish each and every moment,” “witnessing the nature’s beauty,” and “holding myself back.” These choices help convey enthusiasm and disappointment, and the bonfire anecdote gives you some topic-specific language. There are also several inaccurate or awkward choices, including “one the best experience,” “caught the fire,” and “hazardous chemicals in the ground to kill the tiny insects.” Spelling slips such as “beggining,” “Eqaully,” and “desperatley” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling carefully; precise wording will make your advice clearer without losing its warm tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including the conditional-style advice about what Rida may experience and the longer sentence explaining why you cannot attend. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “I hope you are doing well, I read your letter” needs a full stop or a conjunction between the clauses; “one the best experience” is missing an article and has a number mismatch; and “a group my friends” needs “of.” The construction “Equally important is another aspect that you should take care of is…” also has a faulty sentence pattern. Review clause boundaries, articles, and singular/plural agreement, then proofread longer sentences to ensure each has a clear grammatical structure.

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