Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Josh,

I hope you're doing well. I read in your letter that upcoming month you are planning a camping holiday for the first time. As a beginner, I would love to suggest soem crucial points that will help you to enjoy the thrilling experience

To begin with, it will be the best time to spend with your friends. After working so hard in coperative job sector, this trip would surely make your mind fresh and relax. In addition, the place that you choose is so mesmerizing that it will make you forget the hustle life and bring peace.

Furthermore, there are some of the pros and cons I'll share. As you'll be setting up your camping tent, make sure to check the place which is out of danger and animal free. Apart from that, keep all the necessary items along with you such as medications, toiliteries, processed and canned food. However, there are some of the petrol pumps available over there but you need to be prepare beforehand.

Therefore, I really want to joining with you guys in this camping but sadly my exam's are starting the same month you are planning to travel. Otherwise, I would love to be part of your group.

I wish you all the best and enjoy.

Take care

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three points: you explain that the trip could refresh Josh and offer a peaceful break, mention practical risks and preparation, and clearly say you cannot join because of exams. The friendly tone and direct advice suit the letter. However, the reasons camping would be enjoyable are quite general, and the disadvantages are not clearly explained: checking for danger and bringing supplies are mainly precautions, while the petrol-pump point is difficult to understand. Develop these ideas with specific examples, such as uncomfortable weather, insects, or limited facilities, and explain how they might affect the trip. This would make the response more fully developed and balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement, moving from an opening to reasons for enjoying camping, practical considerations, and your answer about joining. Paragraph breaks help the reader follow these stages, and linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “In addition,” and “However” show how ideas relate. Some connections are less clear, though: “Furthermore, there are some of the pros and cons I'll share” announces a contrast, but the following details do not clearly separate advantages from disadvantages. The petrol-pump sentence also feels disconnected from the advice around it. Use paragraphs to group each task point and make the relationship between each example and your main idea explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range for a friendly advice letter, including phrases such as “mesmerizing,” “hustle life,” “necessary items,” and “part of your group.” These choices help convey enthusiasm and a personal tone. However, several word choices, collocations, and spelling errors reduce precision, including “coperative,” “soem,” “toiliteries,” and “make your mind fresh and relax.” Some expressions are also unnatural or unclear, such as “cooperative job sector” and “animal free.” Aim for familiar, accurate combinations rather than adding vocabulary that does not fit naturally. Proofreading spelling and choosing precise phrases for camping conditions would make your meaning clearer and your vocabulary more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the conditional advice “As you'll be setting up your camping tent, make sure to check…” and the reason clause explaining why you cannot join. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “I would love to joining” should be “I would love to join,” and “you need to be prepare” should be “you need to be prepared.” There are also issues with articles and sentence punctuation, as in “upcoming month” and the missing full stop after “experience.” Review verb patterns after modal verbs and infinitives, and check articles and punctuation when editing.

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