Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Dear Rafi
I wish you are well.I want to some informe you that,holiday camping.
I think this summer camping will be very enjoyble for ypu.because,this camp side has a very beautiful park and beautiful neture.i think you will be enjoy this park and nuture.
I say you you must carry your some necessery thinks like candle or water bottle and confortable shoes.
I think this wheather is perfect for camping so i wish you should go thier and enjoy this time.
Think you for your timr and cocsiderstion.
Your sincerly
Sharmin Sultana
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
You make a relevant attempt to explain why Rafi might enjoy camping, mentioning the beautiful park and nature, and you offer a few practical suggestions. However, the task is only minimally addressed: you do not describe any disadvantages, and you do not say whether you would go with your friend this summer. The advice is also very brief, so the reasons for enjoying the trip are not developed or supported. The response contains 92 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 150 words. To improve, cover all three bullet points explicitly and add specific details—for example, mention uncomfortable weather or insects as drawbacks, then clearly say whether you can join Rafi and why.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The letter has a basic sequence: a greeting, a reason to enjoy camping, some advice, and a closing. This gives the reader a simple overall path through the message. However, the ideas are not divided into clear paragraphs, and the abrupt transitions make the letter feel like a list of short statements rather than a developed message. The opening, “I want to some informe you that,holiday camping,” is difficult to follow, while repeated “I think” does little to connect or develop ideas. Use separate paragraphs for your reasons, possible disadvantages, and whether you will join, and link them with clear expressions such as “One drawback is…” and “As for going together…”.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “camping,” “park,” “nature,” “water bottle,” and “comfortable shoes,” so the basic subject is identifiable. However, the range is narrow and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make the message less clear, such as “enjoyble,” “nutere,” “necessery,” and “thinks” where you mean items. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “this camp side” and “enjoy this time.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe a “scenic campsite,” say your friend may “enjoy the natural surroundings,” and refer to “essential supplies” rather than “necessary things.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, with little variety in sentence structure. There are attempts to form longer sentences, but control is weak: “I think this summer camping will be very…” needs a more natural subject and verb pattern, and “I wish you are well” does not use the appropriate verb form after “wish.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “I wish you are well.I want…” and “because,this camp side…”. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then combine ideas using clauses such as “You would enjoy camping because…” and “Although the weather may change, …”.
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