Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Ali,

I have received your letter today regarding your request on my personal views about the camping holiday in Naran valley. Firstly, Iam very much excited to learn that you are going on your camping holiday and I am happy for you. I must admit that you are going to cherish every moment of your camping holiday because of the amazing landscape that you are going to witness during your stay.

it is pertinent to mention here the possible setbacks that could arise there. You must not forget to keep warm clothing, including jackets and long socks, and joggers due to the possibility of snowfall there. Furthermore, you should not forget to book the hotel in advance as the peak times of hotels are approaching in the peak of summer.

I would have loved to join you in this adventurous camping holiday in the Naran valley. However, I could not accompany you in this tour, as the closing of Financial year is near and my company has declined my request for leave. However, I will be telephonically available 24/7 for you as its your first camping holiday in summer.

Best Regards,

M. ADEEL ASHRAF.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that the scenery in Naran will make the trip enjoyable, warn about cold-weather clothing and accommodation, and clearly say you cannot join because your leave request was declined. The reason for your friend’s likely enjoyment is relevant, but it is mainly asserted through “amazing landscape” and “cherish every moment” rather than developed with a specific example of what they might see or do. The disadvantages are also somewhat mixed: snowfall and the need for warm clothing are useful cautions, while booking a hotel is more practical advice than a disadvantage of camping itself. Develop these points more directly and make the drawbacks clearer to give the letter more balanced coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: encouragement, practical cautions, and your answer about joining. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and transitions such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” and “However” make the progression easy to follow. This shows a coherent arrangement and some effective linking. At times, though, the connectors feel formal or repetitive for a friendly letter, particularly the repeated “However” in the final paragraph and “Firstly” at the start. The shift from disadvantages to hotel booking also makes the second paragraph’s focus less clear. Use more natural links and group related advice together so the progression feels smoother and less formulaic.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary, including “cherish,” “setbacks,” “adventurous,” and “accompany,” and the meaning remains clear throughout. There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “it is pertinent to mention” and “telephonically available.” However, some choices are unnatural or overly formal for a personal letter: “request on my personal views,” “peak times of hotels,” and “in this tour” do not sound idiomatic in context. “Camping holiday” is repeated, and the description of the landscape remains general. Aim for natural conversational phrasing and more precise expressions for the scenery, weather, and practical drawbacks; this would make your vocabulary more flexible and appropriate to the audience.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because,” “as,” and “that,” and most sentences communicate their meaning clearly. Some grammatical and punctuation errors remain. For example, “Iam” should be separated as “I am,” and “as its your first camping holiday” needs the possessive form “it’s.” The phrase “I could not accompany you in this tour” also has an inaccurate preposition within the sentence pattern; use “on this trip.” Capitalisation at the start of “it is pertinent” and punctuation around the closing could be more consistent. Review contractions, sentence openings, and preposition patterns while retaining your attempts at longer sentences.

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