Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Anmol,

Hope you are doing well, i was glad to hear that you are going for a camping holiday in whistler for 3 days. I heard that you are going with your schoolmates and you guys are good friends, i really wish that you enjoy your camping. i would advise you to be very careful and cautios because i was jsut checking the news and i came to know that it is going to be rain this weekend when you will be there. So please make sure that you preprare accordingly and be very careful while climbing because the soil will be wet and it will be very difficult and risky for you to do the climbing. I would also like to ask you if i can join you for the camping. I would really love that opportunity. We will enjoy alot together.

I hope to hear back from you shortly.

Kind regards

Jass.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The letter is recognisably addressed to your friend and gives relevant advice about the forecast, wet ground and the risks of climbing. However, it only partially fulfils the task: it does not explain why your friend would enjoy camping, and the disadvantages are reduced mainly to rain and climbing hazards rather than a developed description of possible drawbacks. You ask, “if i can join you,” but this does not clearly answer whether you would like to go with your friend this summer; state your willingness directly and explain briefly why. The opening also treats the trip as already planned, rather than responding clearly to a request for advice. Address each bullet explicitly and add a supporting detail to each idea.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas follow a broadly understandable order: you acknowledge the trip, offer a weather-related warning, ask to join, and close the letter. Basic links such as “because,” “so,” and “also” help show relationships between points. However, nearly the whole message is presented as one paragraph, so the different purposes—enjoyment, disadvantages, and your own plans—are not clearly separated. Several ideas are joined into long strings with commas, which makes the progression feel crowded. Use short paragraphs for the main points and clearer sentence boundaries. A more deliberate sequence, with a direct transition from the benefits of camping to its drawbacks and then your answer about joining, would make the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough everyday vocabulary to communicate the situation and give practical advice, including “camping holiday,” “careful,” “wet,” “risky,” and “opportunity.” The weather and climbing details make the message specific rather than entirely generic. However, the range is limited, and some wording is repetitive or imprecise: “very careful” appears in closely related advice, while “enjoy alot together” is vague. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “cautios,” “jsut,” and “preprare,” which reduce accuracy even though the intended meaning is usually recoverable. Build a wider set of expressions for outdoor activities and possible drawbacks, and check spelling and natural collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The message communicates its main meaning, and you attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example, “I heard that you are going with your schoolmates …” followed by a reason for your warning. However, sentence structures are mostly simple or joined with commas, and the longer sentences are not consistently controlled. Capitalisation and punctuation need attention: “i” should be “I,” and several independent clauses are joined without full stops. There are also errors in verb forms and sentence patterns, such as “it is going to be rain” and “ask you if i can join you for the camping.” Use a mix of accurate simple and complex sentences, with full stops between complete thoughts, and review verb forms and articles.

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