Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear my friend,

I hope yore doing well, & i am very glad to have my suggestion on your holiday.

I would like to suggest as per your planning on to s[pendthe time on your holiday, my suggestion ids for you that you should to have a time to go out and have more relaxed full time, and create a memorable memories additionally rest the mind make it the time enjoyeable, The camping experience very amazing wonderfulll with the leisure time so lets have keep enjoing moments.

There may be the some possibilties of the camping disadvanges are that while camping there may high wind storm come or during the night time dangerous animal harm you too, there may some obstacles are cauesd inconveniets while campign in the night specially.

I belive that the free time have is very diffcult to get from our daily busy routiene life so if i get the cance definietly i would go.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three points: you give reasons camping could be enjoyable, mention risks such as storms and dangerous animals, and say you would go if you had the chance. However, the advice is not always clear or fully developed. For example, “create a memorable memories” and “rest the mind” suggest benefits, but you could explain more specifically why your friend would enjoy the experience, such as spending time outdoors or sharing activities. The disadvantages are relevant, though they would be more useful with practical details about how to prepare for them. Your willingness to go is present, but the final sentence could state more directly that you would like to join your friend this summer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a basic overall arrangement: an opening, a paragraph about benefits, one about disadvantages, and a final statement about joining the trip. This helps the reader identify the main parts of your response. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the long benefits sentence, where several ideas are joined together without clear links. Phrases such as “additionally” and “so” are attempted, but the relationships between ideas are not always clear. Use shorter sentences and organise each paragraph around one main point. A more suitable greeting and a brief closing would also make the letter feel more complete and clearly directed to your friend.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “camping experience,” “leisure time,” “wind storm,” and “dangerous animal.” However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the message difficult to understand. Examples include “possibilties,” “disadvanges,” “enjoing,” and “memorable memories.” Some phrases, such as “relaxed full time” and “have a time to go out,” do not express your intended meaning naturally. Build a bank of common expressions for giving advice and describing outdoor activities, and check spelling and word combinations carefully. More accurate, natural phrasing would make your ideas easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You try to form longer sentences and use clauses to explain benefits and disadvantages, but control is weak, and errors frequently make the message hard to interpret. For example, “I am very glad to have my suggestion” has an unclear grammatical structure, while “you should to have a time” uses an incorrect verb pattern. The sentence beginning “There may be the some possibilities” also has problems with articles and sentence construction. Most ideas are presented in long strings rather than in controlled sentences, so the range of structures remains limited. Practise simple, accurate patterns first, such as “You might enjoy camping because…” and “One disadvantage is that…”, then add clauses while checking verb forms, articles, and punctuation.

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