Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Anshul,
I am writing this email to suggest you about some places which you will enjoy while celebrating your camping holiday for the first time.
Recently, I went to Vancouver Island, which has multiple location such as, Victoria, Esquimalt, View Royal, Langford and Sooke and so on. I think you will enjoy all the Island camping sites.This is to say, they are not only offering best view of nature and wildlife but they are also transit and internet friendly in most of the camping locations.
On the other side, there will be alot of wildbushes and plants which are very hamrful for human body if you encounter them, which you will come in contact with on all sites for camping. I will not be able to join you this summer due to prior committments.
I think you should give it a chance. Good luck!
Regards,
Anushka
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The letter responds to the situation and gives a reason camping may appeal: the island sites offer nature, wildlife, views, and convenient transport and internet. You also mention a possible danger from plants and clearly say you cannot join your friend this summer. However, the advice is only minimally developed: the task asks why your friend would enjoy camping, but much of the first paragraph lists locations rather than explaining the experience. The disadvantage is also vague, and the response does not offer practical advice about avoiding it. The required minimum of 150 words is not met. Develop each point with a specific explanation or example, and make the letter’s advice more directly personal to your friend.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable letter structure, with a greeting, opening, separate paragraphs, and a closing. Its ideas are generally understandable, and phrases such as “On the other side” signal a shift from benefits to disadvantages. However, progression is limited: the opening promises suggestions about places, while the letter mainly gives a brief list and then moves quickly to a warning and your availability. The transition “This is to say” does not clearly explain the relationship between the location list and the benefits, and “On the other side” is an awkward contrast marker here. Organise the body around the three requested points and use clear, natural links between them to make the advice easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including topic-related terms such as “wildlife,” “camping sites,” and “prior commitments.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “transit and internet friendly,” although this phrase is not a natural collocation in this context. Several word choices and spelling errors reduce precision: “suggest you about” is not idiomatic, “multiple location” has an incorrect form, and “wildbushes” and “hamrful” are problematic. “Best view of nature” is also an unnatural expression. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the general message, but the range and control remain uneven. Learn common collocations for giving advice and describing outdoor activities, and proofread spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The letter includes both simple sentences and some attempts at longer structures, for example, “I think you will enjoy all the Island camping sites” and the sentence beginning “I think you will enjoy…” with a contrast clause. Meaning is usually clear, but grammatical control is inconsistent. In “which has multiple location,” the noun should be plural, and the sentence beginning “they are not only offering…” has an unclear reference and awkward structure. The long sentence about plants and encountering them is difficult to follow because several clauses are joined together. There are also punctuation and spacing problems, such as the missing space after “sites.” Aim for shorter, well-controlled sentences, check agreement and articles, and use relative clauses only when their reference is clear.
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