Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Smith,

I am writing to give you some advice about camping, which would be helpful for your first camping this summer.

It will be an amazing experience to go for camping, where you can have a chance to see wildlife. This animals and birds hardly seen in urban areas. Another good thing about is that you could get rid of negative thoughts and unnecessary stress by spending time in a natural place. So, you might focus well in your studies.

But there will be some unfavourable situation you may face. Firstly, if you are unlucky, you may see some dangerous animals. Also, you may face difficulty because of limited amout of livestock like woods, filtered water, food. So, please take care of yourself and use supply mindfully.

I would like to join you for a camping rather than just providing my advice through the letter. But I will have much burden of work during summer as this season is usually get busy at work.

I hope this letter will help you to better plan your camping.

Warm wishes,

Dhaval

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that camping offers wildlife and a break from stress, mention risks such as dangerous animals and limited supplies, and say you would like to join your friend. The advice is relevant and your willingness to go is clear, so the letter fulfils its purpose. Some ideas, however, are less fully developed than others. For example, the disadvantages are listed but not explained in much detail, and the final paragraph says work may prevent you from going without clearly resolving whether you would actually be available. To strengthen the response, explain how your friend could prepare for the risks and make your decision about joining more definite, while keeping the friendly tone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, a paragraph on benefits, one on disadvantages, and a closing paragraph about joining. Sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Also” help the reader follow the list of possible problems, and the contrast introduced by “But” signals the change in your plans. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. “So, you might focus well in your studies” follows the point about reducing stress, but the link to camping is not fully explained. The final paragraph also combines your wish to join with a work commitment, leaving the conclusion somewhat unresolved. Use clearer links between each benefit and its effect, and make the final decision flow logically from your availability.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “wildlife,” “unnecessary stress,” “dangerous animals,” and “limited” supplies. There are also attempts at less common or more formal expressions, such as “unfavourable situation,” though some choices are inaccurate or unnatural and reduce precision. For instance, “livestock” refers to farm animals rather than camping provisions, and “amout” is misspelled. Phrases such as “first camping” and “go for camping” are also not natural English collocations. Aim to learn useful word partnerships for this topic, and check spelling and word forms. More precise choices would make the advice sound fluent and natural without changing your clear message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and more developed structures, including the relative clause in “camping, which would be helpful” and the conditional “if you are unlucky, you may see…”. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in both sentence structure and agreement. For example, “This animals and birds hardly seen” lacks correct demonstrative agreement and a finite verb; “Another good thing about is” is missing a subject or object reference; and “this season is usually get busy” combines incompatible verb forms. Articles and prepositions also need attention in phrases such as “go for a camping.” Review complete sentence structure, subject–verb agreement, and verb patterns, then proofread to catch these errors.

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