Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Ramesh

I am delighted to know you are planning camping this summer holiday.

I think you would enjoy a camping because you loves to do outdoor things.You are a nature lover person.In this capmping, you would going to be explore burning fire, making food on open fire, making tent for living.This thing will refresher you. You would feel fresh and get rid from stressful routine.Some time, camping going to be worse experience . I want be aware to you.Because of bad weather, you would face issue cold nights and insects and bugs in the tent.

It would be great opportunity for me if i come with you this camping. We can spend time together and create unforgetten memories. But recently, I came back from holidays.

I hope you would enjoy camping this summer.I will assist you to organise your trip and help preparing food and other packing.

Best wishes

Babita

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain why Ramesh may enjoy outdoor activities, mention cold nights and insects as drawbacks, and say you would like to join him. The friendly tone and closing are appropriate, and the invitation to help organise the trip adds a relevant personal touch. The response also shows some development beyond simply listing the required points, particularly by linking camping with relaxation and shared memories. However, the reasons for enjoyment are not always clearly explained, and the disadvantages are brief. Your willingness to go is also slightly unclear because you say it would be a great opportunity to come, then add that you have recently returned from holidays. Clarifying whether you can actually go would make your position more consistent.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally sensible order: it opens with a response to your friend’s plans, gives reasons to enjoy camping, introduces possible problems, and ends with your willingness to help. This makes the overall message understandable. However, the ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, so the shift from benefits to disadvantages is abrupt. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, such as “Some time” and “I want be aware to you. Because of…”. Use separate paragraphs for the advice, drawbacks, and your response about joining, and connect them with natural transitions such as “On the other hand” or “As for joining you”. Clearer sentence boundaries and references would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “nature lover”, “open fire”, “cold nights”, “insects” and “memories”. The friendly register is suitable for a letter to a friend. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation, word-form and spelling problems make parts awkward to read: “a camping”, “burning fire”, “This thing will refresher you” and “unforgetten memories”. “Camping” is generally used without an article here, and more natural expressions would be “build a campfire”, “refreshing” and “unforgettable memories”. Check spelling and choose familiar collocations carefully; more accurate phrasing would make your meaning clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a reason clause with “because” and a sentence explaining the effects of camping. However, control of basic sentence patterns is inconsistent, and errors occur in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. For example, “you loves” should be “you love”, “you would going to be explore” needs a corrected verb pattern, and “I want be aware to you” is not grammatically formed. The sentence beginning “Because of bad weather” is also left as a fragment. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because”, “although” and “if”. Check that each sentence has a complete subject and verb.

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