Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
- explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
- describe some possible disadvantages
- say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear anna ,
i think you would enjoy every minute of the camping holiday , because you are a girl who loves connecting with nature and doing the craziest things and livings a healthy life far from luxury and the soundes of cities .
It's can be desadvantigable and causes some problemes if it was a rainy day or if the place you will choose was place who hase a problem of mostics and any others type of small animals .
For me and my freinds i like to go camping this summer on one of the beautifaul beaches of Bejaia you know they have incredible views and a big waves for surfing and a lot intersting places to discover .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You address the three requested points: you explain that Anna enjoys nature and an active, healthy lifestyle, mention rain and insects as possible drawbacks, and say you would like to camp with friends at beaches in Bejaia. However, the disadvantages and your invitation are only briefly stated, so the ideas remain under-developed. The response also contains 121 words, below the required 150, which limits how fully you can explain and support your advice. Make your position explicit by directly inviting Anna to join you, then add practical detail—for example, how rain could affect activities and how to prepare for insects.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The ideas follow a generally sensible order: you first explain why Anna might enjoy camping, then identify drawbacks, and finally describe where you would like to go. This gives the letter an overall coherent arrangement. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, and the links between ideas are limited; the final sentence shifts from your personal preference to your friends without clearly connecting this to Anna’s plans. Use separate paragraphs for the three points and add clear transitions such as “However” and “As for going together”. A conventional closing would also help the letter feel complete.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “connecting with nature”, “healthy life”, “rainy day”, “surfing” and “incredible views”. These choices communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts less clear, such as “desadvantigable”, “problemes”, “mostics” and “soundes”. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “doing the craziest things” and “a big waves”. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise camping vocabulary, such as “mosquitoes”, “waterproof gear” and “outdoor activities”, would help you describe both benefits and drawbacks clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, particularly with “because” and “if”, and the reader can generally understand your meaning. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to cause difficulty. For example, “It's can be” combines incompatible verb forms, “if it was a rainy day” does not fit the future possibility being discussed, and “a big waves” has incorrect article and number agreement. Capitalise the opening “I”, use complete, controlled sentences, and practise conditional forms such as “If it rains, the campsite may become uncomfortable.”
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