Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mandeep,

I am writing this letter to give you some advice for your first ever camping trip. Camping is great advanture for an individual. It teachs you alot about wildlife and about nature too. You will find neumerous activities too do there. For instance, wildlife birdwatching where you can see diffrent kind of birds in sky and in their nests and you can also experience various water activities.

On the other side, camping have some disadvantages. You will have to prepare your fiid by yourself. But, I am sure you will easily manage that and you will learn some good cooking leasons from thier. Also, there will be no network available during camping so you will not connected with your loved ones. Other than that, I would also like to join you in camping this summer but unfortunately I am going out for a project of my job during that time. But, we will surely plan someother time together. Make sure to write me letter about your experience whenever you are back.

Your sincerely,

Gautam

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points in the task: you explain that camping offers contact with nature and activities, mention cooking and limited phone access as disadvantages, and say you would like to join Mandeep but cannot this summer. The reason for your friend’s likely enjoyment is relevant, with birdwatching and water activities as examples. However, the disadvantages are not equally convincing: preparing food is presented as something your friend can manage and learn from, so it sounds more like an opportunity than a drawback. The closing also gives a useful next step by asking for a letter about the trip. To strengthen the response further, develop each point more clearly and make the disadvantages more specific.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally sensible order: advice about the benefits comes first, followed by disadvantages and your availability. Linking phrases such as “For instance,” “On the other side,” and “Also” help signal the relationships between ideas, and the reader can follow the overall message. Some connections are mechanical or imprecise, however; “On the other side” is not the natural contrast marker here, and “But” begins a sentence after a disadvantage without clearly showing how the ideas relate. The benefits and drawbacks are also grouped into long blocks rather than clearly separated paragraphs. Use conventional paragraphing and more precise transitions to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “wildlife,” “birdwatching,” “water activities,” and “network.” There are also attempts to be specific, such as describing birds in the sky and their nests. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “advanture,” “neumerous,” “fiid,” and “leasons” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “wildlife birdwatching” and “going out for a project of my job.” Aim for accurate spelling and natural collocations, such as “go birdwatching” and “work project.” This will make your vocabulary more reliable and appropriate for a friendly letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and longer sentences, including a sentence that gives examples of activities and a longer explanation of why you cannot join the trip. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in basic structures. For example, “It teachs you” needs subject–verb agreement and the correct verb form, while “camping have” should agree with its subject. In “you will not connected,” the verb phrase is incomplete; use “will not be connected.” Articles and sentence punctuation also need attention, as in “Camping is great advanture” and the comma after “But.” Practise checking agreement, complete verb phrases, and articles while retaining your attempts at longer sentences.

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