Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Amrit,

I hope you are doing good. I got to know that you are thinking of going to the camping this summer. I want to suggest Muskoka trail which I had visited with my housemates last summer. It was also a fun for a non-adventourous person like me. We had already done pre-booking before a month. We went at the camp site by hiking and some of the people had also rented bicycle, and we had our camp setted up on the banks of the lake, the breeze, water sound and the campfire at the night was the cherry on the cake for this camping trip. However, I also wanted you to know about cons like having mosquito bites. On top of this, the food and water which we carried was not enough, and to buy them we have to walk 30 mins to the cafeteria of the place. Lastly, dont forgot to carry torch with you.

I would love to go on a camping tour with you as we didn't went for any till now.

Let me know about your future plans,

Yours dearest friend,

Priyanshi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain why camping could be enjoyable through the lake, breeze and campfire, mention disadvantages such as mosquitoes and limited food and water, and clearly say you would like to go with Amrit. The personal example about Muskoka also makes the advice relevant and friendly. This meets the task well, though some points are more fully developed than others: the enjoyable aspects are described vividly, while the disadvantages are listed briefly and the torch reminder is not explained. To strengthen the letter further, add a little detail about how your friend could prepare for the drawbacks and make the recommendation more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall progression: you introduce the camping idea, describe your experience, give cautions, and finish by inviting your friend to go with you. Connectors such as “However,” “On top of this,” and “Lastly” help signal the shift to disadvantages. The friendly opening and closing also suit the purpose. Some cohesion is less controlled within the long description of the trip: several activities and details are joined in one sentence, making the sequence harder to follow. The disadvantages also appear as a list rather than a developed paragraph. Use clearer sentence boundaries and group the positive experience and practical cautions into distinct paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a personal letter, including relevant expressions such as “campfire,” “banks of the lake,” “mosquito bites,” and “pre-booking.” The sensory details help convey why the trip was enjoyable, and the tone is generally appropriate. There are, however, some inaccurate word choices, collocations and spelling errors, including “going to the camping,” “a fun,” “camp setted up,” and “adventourous.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Aim for familiar, accurate combinations such as “go camping,” “a lot of fun,” and “set up our camp,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which I had visited” and a sentence explaining the shortage of supplies. The main message remains understandable, but some errors in verb forms, tense consistency, articles and sentence construction limit accuracy. For example, “we have to walk” shifts tense in a past account, “we didn't went” should use the base verb after “didn’t,” and “before a month” has an incorrect preposition pattern. The long sentence beginning “We went at the camp site” also joins several clauses without clear control. Practise past-tense narration and divide long sentences into shorter, complete units.

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