Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sarah,

Glad to see that you are considering to go for a camping holiday. I am amazed by how much you have opened yourself for new experiences.

You will enjoy the time, as it would have camp fire, barbeque party. Moreover, I know how much you adore stars. During your time in camping, you will be fascinated to watch milky way around in the midnight. I would suggest go during the no moon night, as it is the best time to see the stars.

Adding to some of the above ideas, let me also warn you about the mosquitos and bug situations. There would be lots of mosquitos, as it would be dark. Mark my words and take some anti- repellant bug spray and barrier cream for the mosquito bites. I know how sensitive you are towards these kinds of situation.

I would love to join you for camping, as you know I just need an excuse. If you are planning towards the March break, I will join you. Let me know, when you are planning.

Thank you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points and maintain a friendly, personal purpose. The reasons your friend may enjoy camping are specific: you mention a campfire, a barbecue and her interest in watching the Milky Way. You also give a practical warning about insects and clearly say, “I would love to join you.” These details make the advice relevant. However, the disadvantages are represented almost entirely by mosquitoes and bugs, and the advice about choosing a moonless night is not fully explained or balanced against practical considerations. The invitation is conditional on “March break,” which may not clearly match the stated summer holiday. Develop the drawbacks a little further and make the timing consistent to give all parts of the letter equally clear treatment.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, reasons to enjoy camping, a warning, and your response about joining. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these shifts, and links such as “Moreover,” “Adding to some of the above ideas,” and “If” show attempts to connect points. The progression is generally understandable, though some transitions feel mechanical or do not accurately describe the relationship between ideas; for example, “Adding to some of the above ideas” introduces a disadvantage rather than an additional positive idea. The final “Thank you” also feels abrupt after the invitation. Use simpler, more natural transitions and close with a friendly sign-off to make the letter flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for an informal letter and include relevant topic vocabulary such as “camp fire,” “Milky Way,” “mosquito bites,” and “barrier cream.” The personal references to Sarah’s love of stars and sensitivity to insects also help the language feel tailored to the reader. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, however, including “opened yourself for new experiences,” “time in camping,” and “anti-repellant bug spray.” “Mosquito” is also misspelled as “mosquitos” in standard usage, and “no moon night” is not a natural expression. These choices do not prevent understanding, but more idiomatic phrasing would improve precision and fluency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “as,” “as you know,” and “If,” and the main message remains clear. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly in verb patterns and sentence construction. For example, “considering to go” should use a gerund after “considering,” while “I would suggest go” needs a different verb pattern, such as “I would suggest going.” “There would be lots of mosquitos, as it would be dark” also has an unclear relationship between the clauses, and “Let me know, when you are planning” has unnecessary punctuation. Work on verb patterns, clause connections and punctuation; greater accuracy in these areas would make your varied sentences more controlled.

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