Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
• describe some possible disadvantages
• say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sam,

How have you been doing? I hope life is treating you well! I am gald that you asked for my advice on your camping holiday, which i would love to give you suggestions about.

I believe this is a great idea of spending your summer break, where you will have new experiences and also you will learn many useful skills.

However, there are some negative aspects of camping holidays. One of them is wild danger, such as bears and wolfs. There are some ways you can protect yourself from these dangers. Following safety measure can minimize these dangers, such as carrying bear spray and knife.

I would really like to join you on this camping trip, however; I have health emergency at home, as my sister is unwell. So i have to take care of her. I hope your will enjoy your holidays with your frineds.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Have a safe trip,

Gurdial Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that camping offers “new experiences” and useful skills, mention risks from wildlife, and say you would like to join Sam but cannot because your sister is unwell. The purpose and friendly relationship are clear. However, the reasons your friend might enjoy the holiday are only briefly stated, and the disadvantages focus almost entirely on animal danger. The safety advice adds relevant detail, but “carrying bear spray and knife” does not explain other practical drawbacks, such as uncomfortable weather or limited facilities. Your reason for declining is understandable, though it could be expressed more clearly and sensitively. Develop each point with a little more specific explanation to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: friendly opening, reasons to camp, possible dangers, your availability, and a closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and links such as “However” and “So” make the relationships between ideas easy to follow. This gives the response a coherent progression. To make the organisation more flexible and polished, avoid joining contrasting ideas with “however” in the same sentence using a semicolon, as in “I would really like to join you … however; I have…”. A full stop or a suitable conjunction would be clearer. The transition from the safety advice to your personal circumstances is also abrupt; a short linking phrase could help the letter flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “camping holiday,” “summer break,” “experiences,” “safety measure,” and “protect yourself.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and “minimize” is an appropriate verb for describing risk reduction. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “wild danger,” “great idea of spending,” and “health emergency at home.” There are also spelling errors in “gald,” “wolfs,” and “frineds,” which reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim for more natural phrases and check spelling carefully; for example, describe “dangers from wild animals” and say camping is “a great way to spend” the summer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including the relative clause in “your camping holiday, which I would love to give you suggestions about” and the reason clause “as my sister is unwell.” Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “I am glad that you asked … which I would love to give you suggestions about” has an awkward clause structure; “I’d be happy to give you some suggestions” would be clearer. In “Following safety measure can minimize these dangers,” the singular noun needs a determiner or plural form. Capitalisation is also inconsistent: “i” should be “I.” Review sentence boundaries and punctuation, especially the semicolon after “however,” to improve control.

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