Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This essay about of crime .How held in our society.The crime rate was very high day by day .I seen many crimes on tv and newspaper.i descus all thing in this essay . Many countries make film and dramas on crimes because they wants that there country population have more advance and learn about crimes how makes crimes .And they protect him from dangerous people. Many countries Making dramas and novel on crime because they give knowledge people .And people learn that how to treat criminal .In my neighborhood one cause is that they always seen movies .when one criminal come on there house and request her to gives some because he is very hungery When she see them she understand that he is may be criminal .she cannot give him food and said that you can go now .after some time she see thats the police vane come her house and one police man asked her for one man are come here and the police man describe the shape man who is recently gone . she tells him all incidence .she protect her self because always see in the drama in same seen created and she learn from TV and novels

in conclusion i think it is most important thing how we learn from tv and novels .When seen thats thing we were more advance and train how to treat criminals and take care our self and our childern .It is very good for us. Because we born in modern world .There we have face many challenges of life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both parts of the prompt: you suggest that crime stories are popular because they teach people about crime and personal safety, and you state that they are beneficial. The neighbourhood anecdote gives a relevant example of someone recognising a possible danger after watching crime dramas. However, the reasons for the genre’s popularity are not clearly separated from its supposed educational value, and the example is difficult to follow. Your opinion appears mainly in the conclusion, where you call these programmes “very good for us,” but it is not explained in a balanced or developed way. To strengthen the response, explain more directly why audiences enjoy crime fiction—for example, suspense or solving a mystery—and develop your view with a clear reason and a focused example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall shape, with an opening, a discussion of crime dramas, an example, and a conclusion. The neighbourhood story is intended to support your point about learning to stay safe. However, the progression is hard to follow because several ideas are joined together in long, unclear sequences, and the opening does not establish a clear direction. Connectors such as “because,” “and,” and “when” are repeated, while references such as “they,” “him,” and “her” make it difficult to identify who is being discussed. Use separate paragraphs for the reasons, your example, and your opinion. Then use clear links such as “One reason,” “For instance,” and “In my view,” and make each pronoun’s reference unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes relevant topic words such as “crime rate,” “criminal,” “dangerous,” “dramas,” and “novels,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand. For example, “more advance” does not express the intended idea clearly, and “police vane” appears to refer to a police van. There are also repeated forms such as “crime” and “learn,” alongside spelling errors including “descus,” “incidence,” and “childern.” Build a more precise set of topic expressions and check spelling and collocations. For example, you could describe viewers as learning to “recognise warning signs” or “take precautions.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express cause, time, and conditional relationships, as in “because they wants” and “When she see them,” but these structures are often inaccurate. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur frequently: “I seen,” “they wants,” and “she tells” in the past-tense story. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also unreliable; the opening fragments “This essay about of crime” and “How held in our society” do not form clear sentences, and punctuation is often missing or misplaced. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, while longer attempts become difficult to follow. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense consistency, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation. Shorter, accurate sentences would make your ideas much easier to understand.

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