Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Bp - 1, due to more ads, due to action movies, teach lessons, keep aware to people of any situation, teach criminals about punishments.

Bp -2 should band, effect children, more crime occur,

It has been observed that nowadays, crime magazines and programs have become renowned in most territories. There are ample of causes and solutions of this precautionary action are elaborated in further paragraphs. My inclination is elaborated in ensuing paragraphs with reasons and relevant examples.

On the one hand, the first and foremost reason is that advertisement play indispensable to spread popularity among people. Because most articles and videos producers prefer to advertise there additions into public to earn money. For example, if individuals find advertise of new books and movies on You tube, then they would like to purchase and watch them. Thus, this sorts of information encourage to individuals to watch them, and ultimately these are become more popular. In addition, most offensive movies create to teach criminals some lessons. For example, The Crime Petrol is the well known program for Indian people, in this shows director try to show some crimes and then show how criminals have been punished by the police officers. Consequently, individuals are keen to watch these kind of movies to protect themselves.

On the other hand, according to my opinion, offensive articles and Television shows should be abandon. Because several criminals try to crime after watching or reading them. For instance, if directors of any crime programs create programs to show how crimes occur and what criminals offence with others, then they would like to obtain few steps from this and will try to apply in real life. Furthermore, children can affect by them. For example, children prefer to watch videos on You tube and learn about this.

In conclusion, although TV shows and articles of crime encourage criminal to offense with innocent people, but these source of information can teach others to protect themselves.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for popularity and your personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. While you mention advertising and educational value as reasons for popularity, the explanation remains superficial. Your opinion is stated, but the argument that these shows should be 'abandoned' lacks depth and nuance. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is supported by more detailed reasoning or specific, well-explained examples. The introduction is slightly confusing as it mentions 'solutions' to a problem that was not asked for in the prompt, which suggests a slight misunderstanding of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand,' 'In addition,' and 'Consequently.' However, some transitions feel mechanical or are used incorrectly, such as the phrase 'There are ample of causes and solutions of this precautionary action are elaborated in further paragraphs,' which is grammatically awkward and confusing. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by these structural issues. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'precautionary,' 'indispensable,' and 'offensive.' However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'advertisement play indispensable' (should be 'plays an indispensable role') and 'these are become more popular.' Additionally, the phrase 'there additions' is a misuse of 'their.' To achieve a higher score, work on using more precise vocabulary and improving your control over word forms and collocations to avoid these recurring errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'advertisement play'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'these are become'), and missing articles or prepositions. While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to cause some distraction. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound. Practicing the correct use of articles and verb tenses will significantly enhance the accuracy of your writing.

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