Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this contemporary era, most of the individuals prefer digital shopping as compared to in-person purchasing. Although, shopping from digital platforms provide wide range of products, discounts, and flexibility, also have some limitations like frauds/scams and degradation of local businesses. However, shopping from websites have more benefits with respect to physical purchasing.
On the one hand, Internet based shopping have demerits like cyber scams, quality issues. For instance, Temu provides wide variety of products and huge discount to lure customers. However, the quality of products is cheap. In addition to this, websites shopping have adverse impacts on local vendors survival which leads them towards the closing of traditional stores. A good example of that is The Hudson Bay Company. Consequently, more dependability on online platforms causing issues like employment terminations, misuse of personal information, and closure of traditional stores.
On the paradoxical side, online purchasing provides flexibility, product filtration, fast pace deliveries, discount perks, time saving. In this modern society, individuals are busy while fulfilling there professional requirements, so they have less flexibility. While, completing there job duties internet shopping can provide them flexibility to do purchase of there choice in their free time. The Amazon prime is a good example of it. Therefore, Internet based shopping is more convenient comparable to in-person purchasing.
To conclude, shopping from digital platforms provides flexibility, wide range of products, discount benefits which makes it more preferred choice on top of local shopping. However, local shops can not be ignored someone family survival depends on it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an opinion on crime novels and TV crime dramas, but the essay discusses the pros and cons of digital shopping. Because the task has not been addressed at all, it is impossible to award a score for task achievement based on the prompt provided. In an actual exam, this would be treated as a memorised or irrelevant response, resulting in a very low score for Task Achievement. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your ideas directly answer the specific questions asked.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. There is a logical flow of ideas within the paragraphs, and cohesive devices such as 'on the one hand', 'consequently', and 'to conclude' are used to link sentences. However, because the content is irrelevant to the prompt, the overall coherence is undermined. The paragraphing is appropriate for an essay structure, but the lack of relevance to the task question prevents a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for expressing simple ideas, using terms like 'contemporary era', 'limitations', 'adverse impacts', and 'flexibility'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'more dependability on' instead of 'greater reliance on' and 'do purchase of there choice'. The range is sufficient to communicate the writer's points about shopping, but it lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. Spelling errors like 'there' instead of 'their' also occur.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('Internet based shopping have demerits'), incorrect preposition usage ('comparable to' instead of 'compared to'), and confusion between 'there' and 'their'. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors is high, which impacts the overall accuracy of the writing. A wider range of error-free complex structures is needed for a higher band.
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