Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter

• explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum
• describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful
• give details of when you would be available for work

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir ,

Assalamualaikum , with due respectfully request i work in museum without pay , because it is my dream. My education is B.A . In addition , i am a private teacher . I doing this job in private school from 2 year .

it is my big dream , i request with you please you heir me in museum .

I like working 2 day in week days , Wednesday and Thursday .

Museum is a beautiful pleace . It is full of history items . I worked with kind heart and good maners . Museum is a big historical and peaceful pleace . It is my goal to work in museum when i am 10 year old .

obedi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make your purpose clear by asking to work at the museum without pay, and you give a reason: it has been your dream since childhood. You also mention your education, teaching experience, and preferred days, so the main points are present. However, the skills and qualities are only briefly stated (“kind heart and good maners”), and you do not explain how they would help museum visitors or staff. Your availability is also incomplete: “Wednesday and Thursday” is given, but not the hours or whether these are the only days you can work. The response contains 123 words, below the required 150, which limits how fully you can develop the application. Add relevant detail and a clear closing request.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The reader can identify the basic sequence of your message: you apply, explain your interest, mention your background, and state preferred days. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and several points are repeated, especially that working at the museum is your dream and goal. Connections between ideas are limited; “In addition” is used, but the letter otherwise moves abruptly from your teaching job to your request and then to the museum’s qualities. The final word, “obedi,” does not function as a clear sign-off. Organise the letter into short paragraphs for your reason, relevant skills, and availability, then finish with a conventional closing and your name.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the application, including “voluntary,” “education,” “private teacher,” and “historical,” so the general topic is understandable. However, the range is basic and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “work in museum without pay,” “you heir me,” and “history items.” Spelling errors in “pleace” and “maners” also reduce accuracy. Repeated use of “dream” and “museum” makes the message less varied. Choose more natural application language and precise terms for your qualities and the museum’s collection—for example, describe yourself as reliable or patient and refer to historical objects or exhibits. Proofreading spelling and collocations would make your meaning clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your message relies mainly on short, simple statements, and there are frequent errors in basic sentence forms. For example, “I doing this job in private school from 2 year” needs a finite verb and a suitable tense, while “it is my big dream” is not consistently capitalised after a sentence break. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “work in museum” and “in private school.” The sentence “I like working 2 day in week days” shows problems with plural forms and sentence construction. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the overall purpose remains understandable. Practise complete sentences, present and past verb forms, and articles, then check punctuation and capital letters.

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