Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter

• explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum
• describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful
• give details of when you would be available for work

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I want to work in museum unpaid becaue i want to gain more knowlegde how the museum thing tells us a story so it will very benefical for my careers that I have worked in museum. As I am software engineer and i have good knowledge of my field it will very useful me so that i can also work in museum. I will avaible immedialty after recieving an offer letter Thank you .

Best regards ,

Usama Sultan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify that you want to volunteer and give a reason: you hope to learn how museums tell stories and gain experience relevant to your career. However, the application is only minimally developed. The task also asks you to describe useful skills and qualities, but saying you are a software engineer and have “good knowledge of my field” does not explain how these would help museum visitors or staff. Your availability is mentioned, but “immediately after receiving an offer letter” is not a clear schedule of days or hours. The response is also 63 words below the required minimum, leaving little space to address the points fully. Add specific examples and a clear availability plan.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a recognisable opening, a short explanation, and a closing, so the reader can identify its basic purpose. However, nearly all the information is compressed into one paragraph, and the ideas do not progress clearly from motivation to relevant qualities and availability. The transition from your software-engineering background to how it would be useful at the museum is especially unclear. The closing is also attached directly to the availability sentence, which makes the ending feel abrupt. Use separate paragraphs for your reason for applying, your skills, and your schedule, and connect each point with simple, accurate transitions. This would give the letter a clearer overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is basic but includes some relevant expressions, such as “voluntary/unpaid work,” “gain more knowledge,” and “software engineer.” These communicate the general topic, but the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make the letter less clear, including “becaue,” “knowlegde,” “benefical,” and “avaible.” Phrases such as “the museum thing tells us a story” are also too vague for a formal application. Choose precise language to explain what interests you about the museum and what you could contribute. For example, refer to helping visitors understand exhibits or supporting the museum’s daily activities. Proofreading spelling and using natural collocations would make your meaning easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because” and “so that,” but the response relies on a narrow range of structures and these sentences are often difficult to control. In “it will very useful me,” the sentence is missing a verb and the construction is incomplete; “I will avaible” also lacks the correct verb form. There are problems with articles and sentence boundaries, including the run-on ending “Thank you .” Most of the message remains understandable, but these recurring errors reduce clarity. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, and check that each sentence has a complete subject and verb.

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