Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Sleep is important for stay healthy. in the modren era, Majorty of masses complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep.I shed some light on both resons and solution to above mentioned statement for which vindication it would be elobarted in the upcoming paragraphs.

To start with,there are many reasions to accocated with it.The first and foremost is,working stress . For example pepole take more stress are job work. Masses doing work overtime at night. Additionly indvidiule use mobile phone at late nig ht.

On the other hand,people try to take sleep and done work on time and try to sleep on time .and avoid use mobile phone at night as well as do physical activities.

In conclusion after taking all aspect in to my considrationi would like that emphsize that,lak

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises the two parts of the question and briefly mentions possible causes—work stress, overtime and mobile-phone use—and possible actions, such as sleeping on time and avoiding phones at night. However, it does not explain what problems lack of sleep causes, so a major part of the task is missing. The proposed solutions are also only listed, with no reasons or examples to show how they might help. The response contains 124 words, which is 126 words short of the required 250-word minimum; this leaves too little space to develop the ideas and support them. To improve, address both questions directly, explain each point, and add relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, a paragraph introducing causes, a paragraph for solutions, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “To start with” and “On the other hand” signal a change in focus. However, the progression is limited because the ideas within each paragraph are not explained or connected, and the conclusion ends mid-sentence (“I would like that emphsize that,lak…”). Some linking is also awkward: “On the other hand” suggests a contrast, although the paragraph simply introduces solutions. Use clear topic sentences, connect each cause or solution to its effect, and finish with a complete conclusion to make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant words, including “stress,” “overtime,” “mobile phone” and “physical activities,” so the general topic is recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate or difficult to understand, as in “resons,” “reasions,” “accocated,” “vindication” and “elobarted.” Phrases such as “masses” and “job work” are not natural choices in this context, and “take sleep” does not express the intended meaning idiomatically. These errors sometimes strain the reader’s understanding. Build a reliable range of topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms and collocations; for example, use “people,” “work-related stress” and “get enough sleep.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing relies mainly on short, simple statements, with little evidence of a controlled range of sentence structures. Frequent errors in sentence formation and punctuation make parts difficult to follow. For example, “Sleep is important for stay healthy” lacks a correctly formed verb pattern, while “people try to take sleep and done work on time” combines verb forms inaccurately. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “in the modren era” and the run-on opening paragraph. The final sentence is incomplete, which further obscures the meaning. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using clauses such as “because” and “so that”; proofread for complete sentences, verb forms and punctuation.

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