Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Sleep issues are quite common these days; people face a lot of difficulties because of them. There are some causes and solutions for this that i will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs, along with examples.

Initially, here are some causes of this; firstly, it has a bad impact on health, as people lose their concentration and have weak memory and slow decision-making.

However, some people suffer from depression and obesity because of the lack of sleep. Moreover, it sometimes leads to road accidents; for example, a few days ago in my city there was a big accident on the highway that crashed 3 cars with a truck , so, after all the investigation they came to know that truck driver was in a sleep because he wasn,t sleep from 2 days.

Here are some solutions to solve this problem. People should have proper sleep as they can make a proper sleep schedule and have to sleep at least 7 to 8 hours daily, especially for working people and students, so that they can focus on their tasks the next day. Secondly, avoid using mobile phones and other electronic gadgets before bedtime it interact them from their sleep. Finally, People can also make a habit of reading or meditation, which really helps them to get out of this problem. For example, in my family, it is a rule for everyone to do reading and avoid using mobile phones before sleep, and by following this rule, we all have good sleep and feel very energetic and active throughout the day.

In conclusion, lack of sleep is a big concern in these days as it leads people,s to face many problems, but it can be solved if everybody changes some habits and their daily routines.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both parts of the prompt: you identify consequences such as reduced concentration, weak memory, depression, obesity and road accidents, then suggest a sleep schedule, limiting phone use, reading and meditation. The highway accident and your family routine provide relevant examples, and the response maintains a clear focus. Some points, however, are more fully covered than others. The health effects are listed rather than explained, and the solutions would be stronger if you explained how people with work or study pressures could realistically change their routines. The personal examples support your points, but the accident account is lengthy relative to the explanation of its wider significance. More development and clearer links between each problem and its remedy would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on consequences, a paragraph on solutions and a conclusion. The reader can follow the main progression from problems to remedies, and examples are placed alongside relevant ideas. You also use signposts such as “Moreover,” “Secondly” and “Finally.” At times, however, these transitions feel mechanical, and the opening promises “causes and solutions” even though the task asks about problems and solutions. Some links within sentences are unclear, particularly in the accident example and the sentence about electronic gadgets. Grouping related effects and explaining their connections, rather than relying mainly on a sequence of listed points, would make the progression smoother and cohesion more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “concentration,” “decision-making,” “depression” and “meditation.” However, the range is limited in places, and several choices or combinations sound unnatural or imprecise. For example, “a big accident” is vague, “in a sleep” does not express the intended meaning naturally, and “it interact them from their sleep” makes the point difficult to understand. Repetition of “proper,” “problem” and “sleep” also limits flexibility. Aim for more precise collocations and check word forms and spelling, including “wasn’t” and “people’s.” These improvements would make your meaning clearer and more natural without changing your ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses with “because,” “as” and “which,” and the main message is generally understandable. However, some sentence structures and punctuation are faulty, especially in the long accident example: “there was a big accident … that crashed 3 cars with a truck, so, after all the investigation…” The relative clause does not clearly identify what crashed, and the sentence needs clearer boundaries. There are also errors in verb forms and agreement, such as “he wasn’t sleep,” and inconsistent capitalisation of “i” and “People.” Try dividing long sentences into shorter, controlled units and check tense, articles and clause structure. Greater accuracy across these patterns would make your varied sentences easier to follow.

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