Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Enough sleep is essential part of human life. I strongly agree that numerous people have face challenges getting enough sleep.

To begin with, Like i said enough sleep is an essential part of life. When we sleep our body is at rest it works more than enough and we work well after that rest. I would like to compare the people who get enough sleep and people can't get enough sleep and other peoples who get enough sleep but not get deep sleep.Numerous people face challenge to getting deep sleep due to social media habbits. People use social media even knowing that they get up early in the morning, the addiction of social media is the major reason people not getting enough sleep. Other reasons, People having workload anxiety , depression are not sleeping enough, some people sleep enough but not getting deep sleep.

Moreover, People getting enough sleep are lazy than those getting deep sleep. People getting enough sleep enen when they are sleeping thought about tommorow work are not sleep well. When they get up early in the morning they feel laziness and tiredness. People getting deep are more active and after getting up they feel free to move and they work well whole day they can't feel that they are depressed.People getting deep sleep are having minimal health than others.People need enough sleep to being active in the life. People getting deep sleep having strong immune system than the people are not getting deep sleep.

In conclusion, People forgot the depression and anxiety when sleeping and minimise the use of social media. People forgot the time when they use social media.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant causes of poor sleep, including social-media use, workload, anxiety and depression, and you mention possible effects such as tiredness, reduced activity and a weaker immune system. However, the response only partially answers the task: the effects are discussed more than practical solutions, and the conclusion’s suggestions to address anxiety and reduce social-media use are brief and unclear. Some claims, such as “People getting enough sleep are lazy,” also conflict with your apparent point about the benefits of good sleep. Develop a clear distinction between causes, consequences and remedies, and explain each with a specific example or reason. A consistent position and fuller treatment of both questions would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the first body paragraph moves between sleep’s general importance, social media and mental-health causes, while the next shifts among laziness, tiredness, activity and immunity without a clear organising point. Repeated references to “people getting deep sleep” also make connections between ideas difficult to follow. The conclusion introduces remedies but does not clearly summarise the discussion. Give each paragraph one main purpose, use pronouns or concise references where appropriate, and connect each supporting point explicitly to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “workload,” “anxiety,” “depression,” “addiction,” “immune system” and “tiredness.” This gives you a basic range for discussing sleep and its effects. However, vocabulary is often repetitive, especially “enough sleep,” “deep sleep” and “people,” and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “minimal health” and “People forgot the depression.” Spelling errors such as “habbits,” “enen” and “tommorow” also reduce accuracy. Build a more varied set of precise expressions for causes, consequences and solutions, and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe health as “better” or “poorer,” rather than “minimal.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason clause in “People use social media even knowing that they get up early in the morning.” However, many sentences contain frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction, which sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “numerous people have face challenges,” “People getting enough sleep are lazy than those getting deep sleep,” and “People need enough sleep to being active.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly the use of capitals after commas and full stops. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb patterns such as “need to be” and comparative structures such as “more active than.”

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