Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays many people face difficulties to get good sleep. There are several problems faced by people due to lack of sleep which I will discuss in the following paragraphs along with some solutions.

To begin with, first and formost is that lack of sleep leads to give birth a lot problems like tiredness, headaches, stress and poor memory. It not only put affect on our physical health but also mental health. People can face difficulty to concentrate on work. They do not have enough energy to do work hard.For instance, some people take a nap during afternoon time then they feel energetic and full of energy.

There are some steps should be taken to get enough sleep. Firstly, make a fixed schedule for sleep. Always try to go for bed on that time. Secondly, regular exercise also help to get good sleep.Avoid using mobile phones before bedtime and always eat healthy diet. Moreover, avoid drinking caffeine in the evening time because it can distrube our sleep. Having comfertable bedroom is also important. Always try to get up early in the morning time and doing work hard whole day to get better sleep. When we our on bed never think about any bad time which gives them any tension and warriors. Talking with family mambers to stay happy and calm.

To conclude, although there are several problems faced by people due to lack of sleep, it can be solved by doing some efforts like less screen time, regular exercise, balanced diet, getting up early.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you identify consequences such as tiredness, headaches, stress, poor memory and difficulty concentrating, then suggest practical measures including a regular sleep schedule, exercise and avoiding caffeine. These ideas are relevant and your response has a clear overall focus. However, some points are listed rather than explained. For example, the afternoon nap is presented as an example, but its connection to the problems caused by insufficient sleep is unclear. The solutions about getting up early and working hard all day also need clearer reasoning, and the conclusion mainly repeats the list. Develop a few key points with a brief explanation or example to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on problems, a paragraph on solutions and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Firstly,” and “Moreover” help readers follow the main points, and the two sides of the question are separated effectively. This coherent structure is a strength. Some linking is mechanical, however, because many solutions are introduced one after another with “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Moreover,” without showing how they relate. The example about an afternoon nap also interrupts the discussion of health effects. In addition, the final sentences about staying calm and talking with family members are not smoothly connected. Group related solutions and use clearer references and transitions to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “lack of sleep,” “concentrate,” “regular exercise,” “caffeine,” and “bedtime.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the reader pause. Examples include “leads to give birth a lot problems,” “put affect on,” and “doing work hard whole day.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “formost,” “distrube,” “comfertable,” “warriors,” and “mambers.” Aim to learn common word partnerships for health and sleep, and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions would make your advice clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including “It not only put affect on our physical health but also mental health” and the sentence beginning “When we our on bed.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, sentence construction and agreement can make some ideas difficult to follow. For example, “regular exercise also help” needs a singular verb, while “There are some steps should be taken” is missing a grammatical link such as “that.” The final sentence in the solutions paragraph is also incomplete or unclear in structure. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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