Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

More recently sleeping difficulties has been a major concern amoung humans, There are lots of sleep related health issues faceb by people who are laking proper sleep.

Firstly, Doctors suggest normal sleep required by a average person is approximatly 8-9 Hours, For body to recover from the stress and tiredness by working whole day. A sleep deprived person is very likely to have both physical as well as mental health issues. Physical health issues include Sore muscles, Weak body structure and slow recovery from injuries. On the other side the mental side effects include Lack of focus, increase in stress and depression and being unproductive while working of studying.

The main reason behind people not getting enough sleep includes a lot of factors like busy worklife, Never ending scrolls on social media and much more. In order to avoid sleep deprivedness most people try to avoid social media dring them bedtime, Many prefer to take powernap whenever thet get a chance during daytime. If the issue is persistant I would advice medical assistance, before the issue gets worst.

Personally I've been through this issue when i was in high school, I has so much stress related to my acedemic performance as well as my athletic performance, which resulted in me not getting enough sleep. Which indirectly lead to me losing my position is school baskteball team, and me lacking behind from my classmates in acedemics. I went to our family docter who prescribed me some medicines which would help be sleep at night and slo focus during day time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as physical health issues like 'sore muscles' and the impact of social media on sleep patterns. However, the development is somewhat limited; the solutions provided, such as 'powernaps' and 'medical assistance', are mentioned briefly without deep exploration. The personal example provided in the final paragraph is a good attempt to support the argument, but it focuses more on the student's history than on general solutions. To reach a higher band, the student should expand on the 'why' and 'how' of the solutions with more detailed reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic progression of ideas from the introduction to the problems, solutions, and a personal example. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For instance, the transition between sentences could be smoother; phrases like 'On the other side' are used, but the connection between ideas within paragraphs could be more sophisticated. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could benefit from more varied linking words to improve the flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate their ideas clearly. There are some attempts at topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'sleep deprivedness' and 'academic performance'. However, there are several spelling errors ('amoung', 'faceb', 'laking', 'dring', 'thet', 'persistant', 'docter', 'baskteball') and some awkward collocations like 'lacking behind'. These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent understanding. To improve, the student should focus on accuracy in spelling and use more precise academic vocabulary to elevate the tone of the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('sleeping difficulties has been'), punctuation errors (comma splices like '...humans, There are...'), and incorrect verb forms ('I has so much stress'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation limit the score. To improve, the student should focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring that sentences are correctly punctuated, particularly avoiding the overuse of commas where full stops are required.

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