Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In today's world, many people have problems in their sleeping cycle. There are enormous number of reason for this issue such as poor diet and spending too much time on screens and there are some reasons to prevent this.

To begin with, some individual do not get quality of sleep due to poor diet. To elaborate, people consume more junk food instead of nutritious meals. As a result, oily food may cause many problems including some serious issues such as obesity and acidity. Therefore due to their physical appears, individuals may give rise to unnecessary thoughts which disturb them during sleeping hours. Another one is that everyone has their own cell phones and laptops. After working hours, people prefer to spend more time on screen rather then sleep on time. This may affect their sleeping cycle as well as their daily routine. For example, if person do not get enough sleep, he may feel tired in next morning.

On the other hand, there are some soluton for this issue. The first one is people should start consuming nutrious food and try to avoid oily food on daily basis. As well as people should start avoiding overeating which may help them to be fit and it is believed that the physical fitness lead to mental wellness. Moreover, Avoid unnecessary screen time and try to build healthy habits instead. for example, hours of scrolling may give unwanted stress. people should try walking at least 10 minutes before sleeping. This may help in improving quality of sleep.

In Conclusion, I believe everyone has hectic schedule but following of some steps such as try to adapt some healthy habits in daily routine,

may help in increasing qulality of

sleep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the link between 'oily food' and 'unnecessary thoughts' is a bit tenuous and lacks clear logical progression. While the solutions are relevant, they are presented in a somewhat list-like fashion. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more specific examples or deeper explanations of the consequences, such as the long-term impact on cognitive function or workplace productivity, rather than focusing primarily on physical appearance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. Additionally, some transitions between sentences are abrupt, such as the jump from discussing screen time to the example of feeling tired. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'nutritious meals', 'hectic schedule', and 'mental wellness'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'soluton', 'nutrious', and 'qulality'. Furthermore, some phrases are slightly unnatural, such as 'physical appears' instead of 'physical appearance'. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and practice using collocations—words that naturally go together—to make your writing sound more precise and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('if person do not get', 'physical fitness lead to') and article usage. There are also punctuation errors, such as the fragmented sentence structure in the conclusion. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentences are complete and correctly punctuated.

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